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May I offer constructive criticism, not on content, but form? A lot of your paragraphs run long, which is fine on the printed page, but tough on the eyes here. A way to remedy that is, whenever a new character begins speaking, treat it as a new paragraph, otherwise it\'s confusing, and disrupts the rhythm of the narrative (at least to me). Don\'t be afraid of punctuation either, that also helps create a smooth flow.

you are a great writter I cant wait until the next installment love is a battlefield comes out it is awesome! cant wait

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