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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ur story is great keep going!
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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
The problem is not with the structure of your sentences. The problem with your writing is more punctuation than syntax. One specific thing that kept jumping out at me and that really messes with the flow of the story is your use of two commas as initial quotation marks. This is quite simply not a punctuation mark in English.
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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
If you want readers, pay attention to your typo. As such the story is very diificult to read and is tiring for the eyes. Add caps when needed, and try to find another way to mark the dialogues. So far, the story looking interesting but, I can't follow a single installement in one session because of the typography used.
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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Don't even think to stop it!
Please!
I read it and liked it from the beginning but I'm too busy in these days, I just have time to read something and go back to study, so I didn't leave reviews!
I can't speak for others but I'm sure there are others who like it but don't leave anything.
I mean, it's not possible this story has no followers!
It has plot, the characters have depth, and there
Please!
I read it and liked it from the beginning but I'm too busy in these days, I just have time to read something and go back to study, so I didn't leave reviews!
I can't speak for others but I'm sure there are others who like it but don't leave anything.
I mean, it's not possible this story has no followers!
It has plot, the characters have depth, and there
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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hi,i m read yoru story and it is perfect. ilove it. but ı am selfish and i was nat write review... but pleaseeeeeeeeeeeeee continue to write.. it is perfecttttttttttt
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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey come on keep going! Dont stop now! It's gettin really xcitin!!!!:) It's really freaking good!!!!!!!!!!!! I really wanna know whats gonna happen next go come on dont keep me with anticipation! You're a great writer. Neva 4get that!
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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ah yay! love the story!
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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hi. I like your story. And I love the point that Draco killed his father!!! Run with it some more. There is truly a nice, romance getting started here. Maybe the two of them need something to work on together. :-)
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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
The story itself is rather interesting, and I would like to continue reading it. However you do have a major problem with basic grammer skills. Much of the story isn't capitilized or punctuated correctly. I think this holds many people back from enjoying your story and you would be much better received if you improved this. I would suggest finding someone to edit it for you. I hope this was helpful. And don't worry, you're not the first writer to suffer from grammatical mistakes.
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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ahh! how could you stop there!! please update!! I like the story, let them still fight. i love it when they are pasionate, love and fight.