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I like your story and look forward to an update... don't worry about taking awhile to update... we all know how real life can be... I hope that your health improves and that you are able to find a good job.. I know that's hard with today's market!

good story, but kind of confusing

I began reading your story, but stopped because,
contrary to my penname I can't handle rape stories.
Yours has no rape warning and I'd appreciate one.
I'm really squicky on that stuff and anyyone else
who is deserves a warning beforehand. Please and
Thank You.

I just found and read your story and I think it's fine. I usually don't like HP/DM stories but this is really good. I can't wait for the next chapter!

55+65

"...and began to rape the boy." Idiot. Why the fuck would Vernon rape Harry? You didn't even explain the man's twisted state of mind. 'Began'? You are discusting with details. Most often, an abuser that beats one's children, or wards, will not rape the child while they are in a state of mind that longs for bloodshed. Even if they do, they do not 'begin to rape'. It is not that simple, and not something that can be glossed over like that. Secondly, the knife thing, eleven inches would go straight through Harry. The boy, I can assure you, is not that large. Dudley, is though. Maybe that plot point would work if they switched bodies? Also, if Vernon wanted to hit Harry's spine, he would have no trouble with it. It is not terribly difficult to pinpoint one's largest bone.

Learn how to write, then maybe you won't get any more reviews like this. Maybe put some effort into your work, live up to the name that so many amazing authors create for us when they post on this website.

Lastly, just to let you know that I'm not just some bitch with PMS, there is something I liked, Hedwig's state of mind. I loved how you used the term, 'beloved master.' That part, unlike the rest of it, was beautiful.

That will be all.

I am really enjoying this story. I also can't wait to read more.
Thanks for the great read,
Gina

I am really enjoying your story and hope you will continue. If you would email me when you update that would be great.

Okay, first of all, great premise for a great story. However, you obviously don\'t know how to write correctly. Your story lacks a lot of things including proper dialogue. Go back learn how to write like an evev half-way descent writer then you can try again. But I wouldn\'t suggest ever posting again on any site until you can. Especially if you continue to send out this drivel.

please update already!! xD