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I enjoy the story. However I have to agree with some of the other reviewers and say that there are parts that are confusing and hard to read. Again I repeat that I like the story and the plot, but I think there are something

Thought I would review . . . I think you have a tough outer skin . . . I would be bitching like a drunkin sailor! I have a temper. I think it's good that you keep writing even with the vile F*%^ing reviews. Looked at two or three of them. Ouch!!
But some of them are right, detail can be a pain but it

You asked for a review, so here's my honest opinion

gotta love the plot. geez such mean reviews you have yet you keep writing.
this in itself is what will eventually make you a great writer.
the perserverence to continue on even faced with rejection and scorn.
i like your story. It could use some work though.
Two beta's are better than one.
One to catch all the major stuff and the second to catch all the minor mistakes.
please continue on with your story.
trust me when i say we rely heavily on our beta's.
-eroburn

ps. if you wanna talk or anything my email is iamsoabad1113@hotmail.com. send me an email on how to get in touch with you.

i hope you feel better soon.

First chapter's a dissapointment filled with inacuracys.

I had read your entire story and I must say that this story is by far the most poorly written story that I have ever read on this site.
You have a good idea on Harry being abused by Vernon and is saved by Severus, who ends up being his father.
I really think you should get a new beta from the beta group that we have and get down and dirty with your story. It has potential to be a good story but as it stands it is a very poorly written one. I suggest a total rewrite of the story from start to finish.
There is almost no sense of plot or direction to where this story is going.
And the Aurors wouldn't go after a muggle, no matter what they did to a Wizard or a Witch, they would go after a Wizard or a Witch. Have the muggle police go after the Dursleys. That would be the only proper thing to do.
Please listen to the other reviewers and what I tell you, we only want to help you improve your story to be the best you can produce and to be proud of. This story can be something you can be proud of but how it stands it is not even that. You can improve it with the help of a new beta reader and a reworking of the story.

I don't normally complain, but....

I like your concept but your beta must be an idiot. I find it hard to read because the errors are not fixed. 'busts out' wtf. I'm not blaming you that's the beta's job. I would enjoy it more if it were easier to read. I do like the concept though.

Alright, I normally don't do this but I felt compelled to give a little constructive criticism. I know you are on the defensive due to a few less than helpful comments, but I do hope you listen and do not feel I am attacking you. I can assure you, I am not. First and foremost, your plotline is good. The story reads fairly easily. A great beta is a godsend. If you have a great beta, give them love. They deserve it. I only really have one difficulty with you story. It's dry on the details. It just seems that you are glossing through a story, instead of truly making the reader live the story, and bringing it to life for them. Do not let me discourage you in the least. The only way to get good at something is to keep going at it. Please continue writing. I look forward to future pieces from you. Blessed Be. SpiritChild

Soooo can't wait for chapter 13!!!

Hope to see them up soon :d