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September 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Sorry I have not reviewed before, your story is unbelievably well spoken and gripping. So much so that I will pass chapter after chapter in search of an ending without reviewing. Believe me, you surpass most writers that I have seen and I am eager for more.
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September 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Please, please continue!!!!!! More Snape & Kiaya. Loving it.
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January 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Holy....
Ok, so.. I only just found your story.
Well, honestly, I found it three sleepless days ago. It's a bit long, haha.
Wow. I mean.. seriously... Wow. First of all - you write amazingly well. It was like reading a real, published novel. One that I couldn't put down! Twists and turns of the plot, the way you followed the HP books with just a hinting tease as to what was going on in the world beyond what you wrote, and your characterization all leave me thoroughly impressed. Especially the characterization!! You not only went along and expanded the already-defined personalities of the more familiar characters, but you really delved into the traits of the people you created from your head, and kept loyally to them. I really can't tell you how impressed I was - you even kept your characters true to the discriminations of the time [werewolves, and the mild Harry Potter hero-idea (like when Jasmine couldn't believe she had him fetch things for her, etc.)]
I also laughed so hard at various bits. My absolute favorite line in the whole thing is where Sirius is a shade and says proudly, "I'm a conundrum!". OH! Speaking of Sirius - The way you brought him back was bloody brilliant. It didn't seem at all disjointed in the story, it wasn't predictable (which was amazing.. usually you see it coming a mile away in fanfictions, but I was struck dumb with shock when I read 'I'm not dead.'), and frankly.... it made me extremely happy. haha.
I also loved how you described Jasmine's clothes, and the histories you created behind charms work and so on. Your story is so thorough!!
I'll stop gushing and move along now, but I HAD to tell you how wonderful your story is. I'm extremely jealous of your innate writing talents, haha. I can't even whine to you about Sirius and Jasmine's predicament, because it's so well done - depressing as it is :P
I'll be checking back for more no doubt; thank you for writing this!
Ok, so.. I only just found your story.
Well, honestly, I found it three sleepless days ago. It's a bit long, haha.
Wow. I mean.. seriously... Wow. First of all - you write amazingly well. It was like reading a real, published novel. One that I couldn't put down! Twists and turns of the plot, the way you followed the HP books with just a hinting tease as to what was going on in the world beyond what you wrote, and your characterization all leave me thoroughly impressed. Especially the characterization!! You not only went along and expanded the already-defined personalities of the more familiar characters, but you really delved into the traits of the people you created from your head, and kept loyally to them. I really can't tell you how impressed I was - you even kept your characters true to the discriminations of the time [werewolves, and the mild Harry Potter hero-idea (like when Jasmine couldn't believe she had him fetch things for her, etc.)]
I also laughed so hard at various bits. My absolute favorite line in the whole thing is where Sirius is a shade and says proudly, "I'm a conundrum!". OH! Speaking of Sirius - The way you brought him back was bloody brilliant. It didn't seem at all disjointed in the story, it wasn't predictable (which was amazing.. usually you see it coming a mile away in fanfictions, but I was struck dumb with shock when I read 'I'm not dead.'), and frankly.... it made me extremely happy. haha.
I also loved how you described Jasmine's clothes, and the histories you created behind charms work and so on. Your story is so thorough!!
I'll stop gushing and move along now, but I HAD to tell you how wonderful your story is. I'm extremely jealous of your innate writing talents, haha. I can't even whine to you about Sirius and Jasmine's predicament, because it's so well done - depressing as it is :P
I'll be checking back for more no doubt; thank you for writing this!
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January 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh! And I'm sorry for not reviewing each chapter as I went, but that really is your own fault. You made the thing so damned interesting, I was clicking the 'next chapter' button with incredible impatience to see what would happen next.
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October 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Well, this is going to be mostly spamistic but I just can't help it:
ZOMG! HE IS BACK!!!! *squeeee!*
I've slowly but confidently been pacing through your fic, and thought I'd review to let you know you hooked me from the start, but for reasons unknown I couldnt read it all toghether. I picked it up every once in a while knowing I'd have a good reading ensued, but I just can't wait to see how you follow up now!
I can't wait to see Sirius and Jasmine looking in each other's eyes again, I know, duh, the obvious, hee. But that tension between Snape/Kaya 's got me on the edge of the chair every time, and the Centaur has completely charmed me too. Also, I loved the scene with Remus and the Mirror of Erised, I swear I could see him, very well written, his expretions and corporal language, and the interactions with the other carachters...*nods nods nods*
I know I'm forgetting a thousand things, your way of writing is very singular I think, I haven't read that much fics so as to compare much, but is what I noted. It requiers certain concentration, you have this sentences and vocabulary and link them in a way that is really captivating, though it might be only my PoV :/ , I wouldn't know perhaps?
I don't know if I make sence to you, sorry heeh, I know there was *this* sentence that I *loved* and thought "Woa" but can't quite place it now, I'll make sure I look back and find it to do a proper review.
I also like the ironies and the paradoxes and the drama, Narcissa/Lucius, Bella, Nagini's PoV and all the miths, Snape and his mind, how you get into it...Aagain, I'm not mentioning *a lot* of things, I hope I'll do a proper review sometime. You've been doing a great great work, be sure of it, excuse my lateness and inconstance!
I'm off to see whats next!
Cheers,
Vani.
ZOMG! HE IS BACK!!!! *squeeee!*
I've slowly but confidently been pacing through your fic, and thought I'd review to let you know you hooked me from the start, but for reasons unknown I couldnt read it all toghether. I picked it up every once in a while knowing I'd have a good reading ensued, but I just can't wait to see how you follow up now!
I can't wait to see Sirius and Jasmine looking in each other's eyes again, I know, duh, the obvious, hee. But that tension between Snape/Kaya 's got me on the edge of the chair every time, and the Centaur has completely charmed me too. Also, I loved the scene with Remus and the Mirror of Erised, I swear I could see him, very well written, his expretions and corporal language, and the interactions with the other carachters...*nods nods nods*
I know I'm forgetting a thousand things, your way of writing is very singular I think, I haven't read that much fics so as to compare much, but is what I noted. It requiers certain concentration, you have this sentences and vocabulary and link them in a way that is really captivating, though it might be only my PoV :/ , I wouldn't know perhaps?
I don't know if I make sence to you, sorry heeh, I know there was *this* sentence that I *loved* and thought "Woa" but can't quite place it now, I'll make sure I look back and find it to do a proper review.
I also like the ironies and the paradoxes and the drama, Narcissa/Lucius, Bella, Nagini's PoV and all the miths, Snape and his mind, how you get into it...Aagain, I'm not mentioning *a lot* of things, I hope I'll do a proper review sometime. You've been doing a great great work, be sure of it, excuse my lateness and inconstance!
I'm off to see whats next!
Cheers,
Vani.
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September 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
^_^...psst...*update*
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September 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I just thought I'd leave you comment to show you my appreciation for this wonderful fic you've created. It's a shame most are either too lazy or didn't bother straining their rapidly depleting brain cells for a long fic.
I've read this in three days, it's been my reward for finishing my college work before it's too ungodly late. :) I think you are brilliant. No, let me rephrase that, I KNOW you are brilliant. And I'd love to see more soon... please? Heh.
I'll try to add you to my LJ tomorrow so I can keep an eye on that as well. *gives you a well deserved pat on the back*
I've read this in three days, it's been my reward for finishing my college work before it's too ungodly late. :) I think you are brilliant. No, let me rephrase that, I KNOW you are brilliant. And I'd love to see more soon... please? Heh.
I'll try to add you to my LJ tomorrow so I can keep an eye on that as well. *gives you a well deserved pat on the back*
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July 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Sooooooooo glad you updated! am sat nearly biting my coffee cup in half with anticipation!!!! Didnt mean to cause offence when i asked for a happy ever after.Sorry if i did, but keep on going its wonderful.
Claire
Claire
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July 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Im really really loving this story!!! The development of the relationships is slow enough to be believable but not so slow as to bore me. I REALLY like that you're focussing on characters that don't usually get much of a look-in without forgetting the Voldermort threat and the usual things tat happen in the Harry Potter universe. Each chapter is long so I know it's hard, but PLEASE update ASAP!!
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July 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Good as always, can't help wondering i there is a 'happy ever after'.