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for Tear You Apart

by thecynicalromantic

schedule July 18, 2011 at 12:00 AM
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person Amy
schedule March 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
WOOOOOO! Major brownie points for the Buffy reference! That was awesome keep up the good work!
person Narcissa Black
schedule March 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like that you\'ve got them on an even playing field at the moment. It would be good for Draco to find out about Oliver and make himself crazy with jealous suspicions that she\'s still in love with him. But that\'s just me. It would be helpful to put a space between each paragraph.
person firewall
schedule March 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm, I like that Hermione isn\'t at a disadvantage by being innocent and that she can dish out as good as she receives. Now who could you introduce to Hermione to give Draco a little jolt. How about a little space between paragraphs? It would ease the reading. Let\'s see where yo go next.