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Beautifil! I wish there was more.

^_^

bye

dm

Oh wow! I'm blown away!

This was really great, cyn. I really enjoyed it. (Hhhmm too many creature fics you say? Haha, where do you think weremouse came from).
Bye ^.^~

What is he?

awwwwww that was so cute! *gushy face*

Oh WOW!!! That was a really well written chapter!! I really love the take on the creature feature! Write more soon!!!

First of all, this was great. ^o^ I love the first person POV... most people use third person, so it was a refreshing change. :) And I love creature fics, so you really couldn't go wrong with me as a reader... However, *winks* I did find a few things you might want to fix. I'm not trying to be mean, but you asked, and it's better to have people point these things early. :)

"His arms were ready to pull me back down to his torn body. Blood was forming in small pools where I had bit him."

Change 'bit' to 'bitten'

I was never told that he would respond kindly to me after I all but rape him.

Change 'rape' to 'raped'

You mostly have problems with past-tense bits and pieces... but overall I found those two were the only ones that bugged me. :) For being un-betad, you did an excellent job. *glomps* And it was a sweet fic too... Anyhow, hope to read more from you! *toddles off*

Holy Shit!!! You really did a get job with it.

Loved it, though I do wish it would have been more then on chapter. Any ways great job.

Elle the Evil one

Trying to figure out if you meant for this to be a one shot or not...
and if the fic would lose some of its lustor if prolonged. Anyway, awsome job! Love it