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more story pleezzz

love the story cant wait til the new stuff comes out ur fan

great story and i must say verry ingenious

There are a lot of great ideas in this story but the way you have it written is more like a summmary than a real story. There is no flow to it, and very few details. Its kind of like you are just narrating it instead of letting teh story tell itself if that makes sense.

You have turned Luna into a Marysue. If you are going to have her with all this knowlege, you need to show her developing her skills.

hmmmm,i wonder who the proffessor will be?? ;) this story, and the other one harry's harem ROCK!!!!!!!

I like this story, it is very original and enjoyable.

Two things that I feel the need to bitch about. One is a composit of several smaller things and the other is one big thing. Why are you haveing this site host this fiction. There is nothing that would prevent FF.net from takeing it. Second aside form lackling massive pieces of the story that we would be better of with, what few pieces you do have are rushed at best. Further more you have made Luna into super Luna by giveing her a bunch of powers for no aperent reason. All this combined makes reading this fiction a chore rather than a pleasure. If I didn't realy like the pairing then I wouldn't be able to force myself to read this. When you have more experance under your belt feel free to rewrite this as the one thing you do have is a solid and uncommen idea.

I don't understand why you don't have more reviews, so I thought I would give you one. I like longers chapters but since I read all 8 at one time...wasn't a problem. I like the idea of a multiple personality within Luna....explains her spaceyness I guess

Keep going with this fic and remember that this section usually doesn't have a lot of hits and even fewer reviews...don't let it get you down. I'll be reading more as you post them...but I might wait til there are a few of them at a time.

so...is it luna who he marries?