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by lightgoddess

person amberanime
schedule January 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I LOVE IT
ITS SO AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW
schedule September 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Beautiful.
person silent pluto
schedule August 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
well yum!!!! ^_^
person Avanell
schedule January 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
See...this story is a perfect example of why the story Biding his time could end in a beautiful sharing relationship. Awesome job! No jealousy, no bs, just loving sex. Love it!
person Bargle5
schedule January 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
My only complaint is that I would have liked to know more of what was going through the character's minds. Otherwise nicely done. Meets all the requirements. Good job.
Technical thing: Towards the end there's a typo. You've got 'though' where you seem to mean 'thought'.
I get those myself. No how many times I proofread a fic and get it betaed, there always seems to be typos. Sigh. :-)
person Bargle5
schedule January 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oops, forgot to mention I see you incorporated the title of my avatar in your title. Nice touch. Thank you!