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January 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Bravo! That was fantastic.. and yes.. it is a common fantasy. Very hot when only a fantasy.
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January 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
V. v. nice....I wouldn't mind a bit of role play meself (as long as it IS play) I was a bit hesitant when I read it was sgstd. rape but so glad when they turned out to be trying out fantasies...that way I couldn't feel bad about liking it, lol. Now you have to have them trying out something else...hermione as harem girl, perhaps? ;) nice one.
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January 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
The dialogue of the characters were clearly out of character, the story far too short and stilted for any sense of depth or personalisation, yet despite not liking the story, I have to say that as a writer you do have potential. I like your style, it's just not particularly suited to a Hermione/Snape fic. With closer study of the nature of the characters, I think you could create a fantastic story, one shot or longer. I hope you persevere and take this as constructive crit, not a flame.
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January 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Cool. I really enjoyed it.
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January 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great one shot! I love stories like this where the two play out fantacies! Awesome story!
Tiffany
Tiffany
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January 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
WOW, you are an amazing writer.