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for A Royal Flush

by slygriff21

person sheedy
schedule January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Voldy better kiss is ass good bye because I'll bet grandma is hell on wheels.
person QueenRuby
schedule January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
MWahahaha *Clears throat* Anywho I have a sneacking idea what is in store for poor Sev. Ah well back to work on my story. Though Sev is being dificult in this chapter so any more distractions are welcomed.
person June W
schedule January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ch 2-3 - who was the fourth Death Eater who killed the Grangers? Can't Adrienne stay Queen until Hermione becomes older? I'm glad Severus can stop being a spy. Thanks for updating!
person Evelynn
schedule January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Itis pretty good so far, can't wait for the next update!
person FLBanshee
schedule January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very cool fic! Please keep going!
person snapegirl88
schedule January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
BLOODY GREAT
PLEASE KEEP IT COMING
I LOVE IT
person Jaden Snape
schedule January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Nice...very nice. More please
schedule January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
great story. enjoying very much. waiting for more. p
person angel
schedule January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow please please update soon i would love to read what will happen next ..later for now


angel
person GrammarChick
schedule January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Work on your grammar, logic, similes, etc. You have a wonderful imagination, as all can see through your many posted stories. Nevertheless, while you have improved, your grammar is still dreadful, and detracts from the good points of your works. Even if you don't have an inclination to pick up "Elements of Style," just listen to the HP movies. Has any character EVER said, "Me and her" or "Me and (whoever)." Please review basic English grammar and incorporate into your fiction.