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June 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
really good
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September 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Your story was good, but a bit confusing and could have used quite a bit more detail. Keep working on it and don't be discouraged by others criticism. ;)
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December 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really liked it... I don't think you should write more, it's briliant as a standalone...
And I don't agree with Enkanowen on anything that he/she says.. Sirius can be older, just by the fact that he's born earlier in the year the Severus, oh and Enkenowen is allaround just very negative, I liked it...
Hugs
And I don't agree with Enkanowen on anything that he/she says.. Sirius can be older, just by the fact that he's born earlier in the year the Severus, oh and Enkenowen is allaround just very negative, I liked it...
Hugs
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November 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like it so far. Can't wait to read more. Update soon please
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January 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I can only deal with this story with a cat on my head. WTF?! I don't understand what is going on half the time. That was world's worst blowjob. Your sentences are not grammatically correct half the time. Did you even bother to proof-read this? You really need a beta reader. So far this story sucks.
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January 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
*eyes glaze over* Hwt Hwt Hwt! So, do they have a pre-existing relationship...or what? This is an interesting and super promising story in my eyes, please continue!
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January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like it. Really I do. But add more soon and I will by a much happier person.
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January 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Please fix your formatting so it is clear who is speaking when. Leave spaces between paragraphs (new paragraph for each time there is a new speaker) . That makes it easier and clearer to read.