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I am soo enjoying this story!! I so can't wait for the next chappy!!! Your doing a great job on the story. Update ASAP!!!

Well done again! But poor Hermione, I hope she goes into remission or something. Can't wait for more.

Sweety, just beacuse it's been done before doesn't mean it can't be done again only better...
and you have done it better than the ones i have read in the past
i hope you continue the story
it's really really good

I have just finished chapter three and find the story quite likeable. It is well spelled and well storied, other than it being clear that the author is a fashion bug. I did decide to make a comment in one aspect though, your not always careful about making it clear as to who is speaking at the time. In the scene where Dracos mother comes home and finds her son on the couch with Harry, she leaves the room and without ever entering it again she is all of a sudden talking about the boys being found in the position that they are in. This sounds small I know, but what happens is that the reader has to go back and read certain places again to try to clarify for sure just who is speaking. It is work in itself and leaves you as the reader constantly questioning weather they really understand who is speaking this takes away an enjoyment aspect to your story, and your story is too good for that. It may be just a weakness in your writing style that could easily be strenghtened by having a friend sit down with you, and reread this story, because your so familiar with it, and read it together and see if you can catch it yourself with this thought in mind. You may find that it is really easy to see, specially if you read it out loud. Hopefully this has been of help. The doctor.

In re-reading my review as it was posted I became concerned that I may have not been clear in the part where Dracos mother reenters the room and starts talking to the girls about the postion the boys are in. I am not worrying about when Narcissa re enters the room as far as your writing that she did, but that in said conversation between Harmione and Layla, Narcissa makes a comment and you didn't mention Narcissa having said that and I wanted to make that clear otherwise it would have looked as though I was wringing a towel about just a little thing about writing every time a person leaves or enters a room one way or another you have to make that clear, by saying Narcissa said or Naricssa entered the room and added at the end of the comment that was said. Not always easy to be understood clearly by the written word, probably why it is said to be careful what you write down. The doctor.

oooo you are still teasing us!! i want a kiss!! a nice long one...yeah, that would be VERY nice.

awwww, Hermione and cancer? Is this going to be all sad and angsty or is it going to be a happy ending? (more for my own sanity than a need to know)

Yeah, more! But I still think the boys need to be locked a room.

Oh I can't wait for chapter 5! They told off Ron and Ginny. Too wonderful! She's dying of cancer? No!!! She can't die!

Can't wait for chapter 4!

*dances happily* there is more!! yay! well if nothing else, the one that is similar the furthest we got was finding out about all of them being elemental and I don't think I have seen it since (which is why I wondered if this was the same only being re-worked).

I'm loving it. and i so want to kick draco or harry...they could at least kiss!