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update plz

many questions.. Very good 3rd chapter..man he is a ass alright but i love snape anyway lol.

Draco is a bit of a ass isn't he. *shakes head* Glad Hermione knocked him on his ass, he asked for after the day she had. Keep up the great work!

What an idot that Ron is. Good grief, he is lucky she didn't hex first and ask questions later. lol Great Chapter.

Good chapter (3), I enjoyed it. Chapters can always be longer, but that chapter was long enough. Again, I loved the chapter.

oh lord thats funny, a real good one! I thought it was a death eater not ron lol

The idea of the story sounds good. I've noticed you continue to repeat what happened especially in the second chapter; first from Hermione's point of view and then from Ron's. It was, more or less, listening to the story twice, the chapter is short so when you tell the story twice in a short chapter there isn't much in it. So two things: longer chapters, and don't put in uneccessary paragraphs; for example when you explained why Ron checked on Hermione, you also repeated most of what happened in the exchange which resulted in taking up half the chapter. You could of covered that in a couple of sentences and furthered the story a bit more, such as going back to Hermione or if Ron has a big part in the story, then continuing on with him. I'm not trying to be overly critical, but I think it would help you improve as a writer and make the story more interesting for readers. Good luck witht the next chapter :)

You have my attention! I can't wait to find out what happens next! Update again and soon!

Tiffany

Great beginning!! Don't most wizards keep their wands on their nightstand though (Harry always has his on his nightstand along with his glasses)? Was it Snape that blasted the door? Please update soon; I gotta know!

Snapeluva- for teh keeping their wamd on the nightstand thing, not necessarily....they could keep it wherever they wanted...just a habit. as for me, i keep mn eunder my pillow...(jk...i wish i had a wand!)


As for the story, I really like it. It has a bunch of potential, and a lot of possibilities. Cant wait to see what happens next. Please update soon!