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July 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
YES CONTINUE AND YES YAOI!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! and how bout sirious/severus??? hmm? hmm???
ASOTA
ASOTA
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March 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hi,
i love your prologue and am waiting for the next one. so if all you need to continue is reviews that make one more^^
sorry for my english but i'm french and don't speak fluently^^
i would like to read this story 'til its end...
byebye
max
i love your prologue and am waiting for the next one. so if all you need to continue is reviews that make one more^^
sorry for my english but i'm french and don't speak fluently^^
i would like to read this story 'til its end...
byebye
max
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February 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
1)Yes! Contine! Please!
2)Yaoi would be good. I would suggest either: Harry, Remus or Lucius. Reasons: Remus because he became a professor in Harry's third year. Lucius cause he and Sev seemed to uh...'hang out' more after Draco joined school. Hehe...and thirdly, Harry (which is most logical to me) because he would be there, there wouldn't be any past issues except maybe the 'You hate my dad' thing. PLUS! Both Sev and Harry seem to want a family. Harry would be an adopted daddy sort of thing! (Sorry. Snarry fan, here. :blushes: )
3)You have a good plotline. Very origional. Nice grammer and spelling (Though that may be your beta, heh) You didn't rush anything. Good discriptions all around. (Making up that guy was funny. I wanan see what Sev is gonna do to him in the long run. :evil ideas: ) Some of the stuff confused me, though. It seemed to jump around a bit while you were explaining the rape/blackmail. Like you were trying to aviod acually writing about it. After that, it makes alot more sense. You might want to do something so that people know Severus is reading out of a book, though, because that confused me a bit.
Ah. Yeah. So.
CONTINUE!
Golden
2)Yaoi would be good. I would suggest either: Harry, Remus or Lucius. Reasons: Remus because he became a professor in Harry's third year. Lucius cause he and Sev seemed to uh...'hang out' more after Draco joined school. Hehe...and thirdly, Harry (which is most logical to me) because he would be there, there wouldn't be any past issues except maybe the 'You hate my dad' thing. PLUS! Both Sev and Harry seem to want a family. Harry would be an adopted daddy sort of thing! (Sorry. Snarry fan, here. :blushes: )
3)You have a good plotline. Very origional. Nice grammer and spelling (Though that may be your beta, heh) You didn't rush anything. Good discriptions all around. (Making up that guy was funny. I wanan see what Sev is gonna do to him in the long run. :evil ideas: ) Some of the stuff confused me, though. It seemed to jump around a bit while you were explaining the rape/blackmail. Like you were trying to aviod acually writing about it. After that, it makes alot more sense. You might want to do something so that people know Severus is reading out of a book, though, because that confused me a bit.
Ah. Yeah. So.
CONTINUE!
Golden
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November 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Yes! Continue! I would love to hear/see more. But I am sorry about the Beta thing. I am not the best to do such. Sorry.
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October 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
love the story so far. i like the way you portray snape so far and i would very much like for this to be yaoi. the pairing you ask? i don't know, maybe kingsley(hopeful smile) or one of the weasleys. also, would really like to know why the spell hurt snape so bad and what happens after he wakes or if he is found by another(posssibly James):)
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October 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
YOU NEED TO CONTINUE WRITING THIS STORY!!
:P
I have a couple of suggestions on it though.
1) You could have it go with any pairing really. I personally would prefer Hermione Granger / Severus Snape, but that is just a preference.
2) You could get a small group of writers, including yourself, and do various versions of this story. Like make this first chapter into something of a challenge. That way, the different shippers would all be satisfied and you'd get the overall credit for such a wonderful first chapter.
I myself have been pondering over the many different possibilities of such a story. I've found myself wandering through the story as to how Hermione might react to this, and how Harry might. So once again I emplore you to continue writing this story, and would like to reiterate that it might be wise to write two or three versions to this story or if you don't personally want to, then lend it out to someone who is very clear as to that the first chapter belongs to you. Cause obviously, no matter WHAT pairing you choose or do not choose, you will get some opposition.
:P
I have a couple of suggestions on it though.
1) You could have it go with any pairing really. I personally would prefer Hermione Granger / Severus Snape, but that is just a preference.
2) You could get a small group of writers, including yourself, and do various versions of this story. Like make this first chapter into something of a challenge. That way, the different shippers would all be satisfied and you'd get the overall credit for such a wonderful first chapter.
I myself have been pondering over the many different possibilities of such a story. I've found myself wandering through the story as to how Hermione might react to this, and how Harry might. So once again I emplore you to continue writing this story, and would like to reiterate that it might be wise to write two or three versions to this story or if you don't personally want to, then lend it out to someone who is very clear as to that the first chapter belongs to you. Cause obviously, no matter WHAT pairing you choose or do not choose, you will get some opposition.
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October 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ooohhh....Hmm...either Sirius/Severus or James/Severus ...^_^ typical i know but its MUST BE YAOI!!! i am excited for the next update! ^_^ hurry please
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September 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
it's a wonderful story!! please continue!!! i would love it if there were slash in this story, even though i was never a big severus fan, i hope he hooks up with someone his own age, like sirius or lucious malfoy... i really like how you wrote it, and hope that something really bad will happen to barnaby... like he getting castrated in a horrible 'accident'... =D anyways, good luck with continuing the story!!! hope you'll update soon!!!
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September 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I enjoy the story and hope that you continue with it. I have no crtiques to offer as this is one of the better written stories that I have come across. I would like to see it yaoi but it's not a problem if you would rather not. if the writing continues the way that it is I would be happy to read any story that you decide to write.
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August 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
this story is definitely unique if nothing else... but it really is quite interesting. I'm entranced. And to answer you questions I believe at least a little slash?yaoi is in order... you can't leave the poor man all alone, I mean he's always wanted a family right? And... let's see, well whoever he ends up with should be somehow related to the potion's incident... either they caused the problem or they took up vehemently for whoever caused the problem. Oh mym we've already narrowed it down... Neville, Seamus, Dean, or Harry. Although I would probably lean towards Harry just because... can you just imagine Harry's reaction when he finds out his potion master has been pregnant for over sixteen years (depending on when you set your story takes place.) That means... in the philisophical way of viewing things the baby would be older than whoever the other father is... But please don't leave him all by his lonesome.
Child of the Darkened Moon
Child of the Darkened Moon