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January 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Im curious, unless i missed it, but ou said incest on the disc o_O whos the incest with?
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January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hello again...
loved what you did with the Dursleys and the prolouge is much better now... chuckled a bit when harry joined the mile high club... I especially liked your description of the hierichy of evil, the old ones and the great beasts... Hopefully someone else will review soon cause I suck at reviewing.... keep up the good work and thanks for the fun story
NChisholm
loved what you did with the Dursleys and the prolouge is much better now... chuckled a bit when harry joined the mile high club... I especially liked your description of the hierichy of evil, the old ones and the great beasts... Hopefully someone else will review soon cause I suck at reviewing.... keep up the good work and thanks for the fun story
NChisholm
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January 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is a rather fun story to read..... my only problem is with the prolouge being slightly hard to read without spacing.... and it was an intreaging prolouge at that, unlike your other reviewers I have no problem with your summery... because its mostly correct... and besides that your not even done writing yet... The way you built up mystic society and the history of magic in the proluge was rather nice a especially the fact you didn't make it utopian...
As for you lemon scenes... they were rather ..ahem... satisfying..... well onto other things.....
I hope you have a suitable torture for the Durslys..... and happy writing
NChisholm
PS... may many good reveiws follow you writing
As for you lemon scenes... they were rather ..ahem... satisfying..... well onto other things.....
I hope you have a suitable torture for the Durslys..... and happy writing
NChisholm
PS... may many good reveiws follow you writing
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January 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
How about putting some spaces in the summary so we don't have to scroll left/right to read it... and now everyone else's on the page too
AU Harry 3year Demon Hunter meets Wizarding world Language,Slave,WIP,Xover,M/F,F/M/M,F/M ,M/F/F,M/F ,Yuri,FemSlash,F/F/F,Bi,Inc,Minor,Anal,BDSM,Bond,DP,D/s,Fist,Furs,H/C,HJ,Humil,Lemon,N/C,Oral,Rim,S&M,SoloF,Spank,Tort,Toys,VS,Xeno
some spaces in the second line would fix the issue. And does/is your story really have all of that .... that you need to have all of those warnings?
AU Harry 3year Demon Hunter meets Wizarding world Language,Slave,WIP,Xover,M/F,F/M/M,F/M ,M/F/F,M/F ,Yuri,FemSlash,F/F/F,Bi,Inc,Minor,Anal,BDSM,Bond,DP,D/s,Fist,Furs,H/C,HJ,Humil,Lemon,N/C,Oral,Rim,S&M,SoloF,Spank,Tort,Toys,VS,Xeno
some spaces in the second line would fix the issue. And does/is your story really have all of that .... that you need to have all of those warnings?
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January 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'll have to agree with the first reviewer.
Where's your SUMMARY?! Those warnings that you used to describe your story are not needed if you've got that many. The whole page is jacked up because of the "select all" you did.
That aside, you may have a good story but a better summary would suffice. I honestly wasn't sure if I was going to read it with all of the un-needed warnings on there. It's like there's no suprise. And if you picked all of those, it makes me feel like you couldn't decide what to write.
Where's your SUMMARY?! Those warnings that you used to describe your story are not needed if you've got that many. The whole page is jacked up because of the "select all" you did.
That aside, you may have a good story but a better summary would suffice. I honestly wasn't sure if I was going to read it with all of the un-needed warnings on there. It's like there's no suprise. And if you picked all of those, it makes me feel like you couldn't decide what to write.