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I actually really like this, the writing style could use a bit of work but the ideas and the background work just fine. I've always had a guilty love for Lucius/Draco, although I've never seen an Mpreg with this pairing before! Not that I mind, it makes a nice change from all those rapefics I hate.

I hope you write more soon, this was fun and I look forward to reading the next chapter.


Skull Bearer.

I liked it, and for a first attempt it was very good. I did want to point out one thing though, in the very beginning you wrote that Draco was in his Fifth year, but the Triwizard Tournament and Yule Ball were in their Fourth year. Keep writing, and I can't wait to see where you take this story.

Looking forward to the next installment
Jessie

WOW! Really sexy! Update soon

This a great start, I really like Draco's characterization. More build up would have been good though the sex was a little rushed I think.

But I'm looking forward to reading more.

I only noticed one mistake...

Lucius collected himself and went down stares to greet his beloved son.

Stairs not stares. Goodluck with the next chapters.

THAT WAS GREAT! The way you described everything, it was just...wow...!

Great story, but break out the paragraphs

This was very lovely. I hope you write more and soon.
For a first attempt it was rather well used in language and you described it very good.