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for A Girl Worth Saving

by AJO400

person Rob
schedule March 1, 2021 at 12:00 AM

I loved all 6 chapters and it was a good story. most people would say not enough sex but i think it was the perfect ending to this amazing story

schedule July 28, 2020 at 12:00 AM

Not a bad premise for a story, but woefully in need of better editing.  Too many cases of mixed verb tenses, jumbled pronouns, bad syntax, and word omissions.  While I like the idea that Voldemort would use Ginny to get to Harry, and the idea that Harry and Ginny would save each other (that is what love does, afterall); the tasks in the solo-wizard tournament are just too close to what was already in the books.  If ever there was a place for some originality in the HP-verse, that was it.  Lots of potential, but needs work.

schedule July 28, 2020 at 12:00 AM

Not a bad premise for a story, but woefully in need of better editing.  Too many cases of mixed verb tenses, jumbled pronouns, bad syntax, and word omissions.  While I like the idea that Voldemort would use Ginny to get to Harry, and the idea that Harry and Ginny would save each other (that is what love does, afterall); the tasks in the solo-wizard tournament are just too close to what was already in the books.  If ever there was a place for some originality in the HP-verse, that was it.  Lots of potential, but needs work.

schedule July 28, 2020 at 12:00 AM

Not a bad premise for a story, but woefully in need of better editing.  Too many cases of mixed verb tenses, jumbled pronouns, bad syntax, and word omissions.  While I like the idea that Voldemort would use Ginny to get to Harry, and the idea that Harry and Ginny would save each other (that is what love does, afterall); the tasks in the solo-wizard tournament are just too close to what was already in the books.  If ever there was a place for some originality in the HP-verse, that was it.  Lots of potential, but needs work.

person xarther
schedule August 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
it was ok
person imperfect hermione
schedule February 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Its an interesting story but you need to work on your writing and your knowledge of Harry Potter- especially the chronology. Right now, some places make no sense, and the Harry Potter stuff is just all mixed up.
schedule January 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
good story i liked it alot
person Justin
schedule January 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
yo dude...i just got done with the first chap. and im diggin the story..but you need to work on ur typin you tend to leave out words or sometimes the sentences just dont make sense...but other than that im really like the story
-Justin Doyle-
person The Gandhara
schedule January 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Not bad. Your style needs polishing, but that's usual with first stories.