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Hay Kayy,
Sorry to hear that you've been sick , i've been sick to with glanjla fever (kissing dieseas) i have just had a flair up and boy i have been sleeping! Neway with this chapter it was well done i like the effort you've put in and draco is just getting so much better i like it!
so whens pansy going to make her move?
i have got to go , tired again and i want to write before i fall asleep. Keep it up and look forward to the next chapter! Get BETTER


Anna

Congrads at the long storiee its really good LoL see you at school tommorow...Later

TWINS

Stupid Pansy i dislike her Oh oh look


RUM TUM TUGGER!! OH YA <3




The Rum Tum Tugger is a curious cat
If you offer me pheasant, I'd rather have grouse
If you put me in a house, I would much prefer a flat
If you put me in a flat, I would rather have a house
If you set me on a mouse, then I only want a rat
If you set me on a rat, then I'd rather chase a mouse

The Rum Tum Tugger is a curious cat
And there isn't any need for me to shout it
For he will do as he do do
And there's nothing doing about it

The Rum Tum Tugger is a terrible bore
When you let me in, then I want to go out
I'm always on the wrong side of every door
And as soon as I'm at home, then I'd like to get about
I like to lie in the bureau drawer
And I make such a fuss if I can't get out

The Rum Tum Tugger is a curious cat
And there isn't any need for you to doubt it
For he will do as he do do
And there's no doing anything about it

The Rum Tum Tugger is a curious beast
My disobliging ways are a matter of habit
If you offer me fish, then I always want a feast
When there isn't any fish, then I won't eat rabbit
If you offer me cream, then I sniff and sneer
For I only like what I find for myself
So you'll catch me in it right up to my ears
If you put it away on the larder shelf
The Rum Tum Tugger is artful and knowing
The Rum Tum Tugger Doesn't care for a cuddle
But I'll leap upon your lap in the middle of your sewing
For there's nothing I enjoy like a horrible muddle!

The Rum Tum Tugger is a curious cat
The Rum Tum Tugger doesn't care for a cuddle
The Rum Tum Tugger is a curious cat
And there isn't any need for me to spout it
For he will do as he do do
And there's no doing anything about it!


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Hey Kayy, i have to say this was one of your best chapters yet it was clear, precise and pretty emotional on pansy part. i liked the way it panned out and the way the story ended on a very good clif hanger. and honestly i think draco was a much better character in this chapter...just the way he lost control of his anger, its one of his inner battles, while staying dominant. thats good conflict! as you can see this is a short review from me because well i am going in town with my bf...would have reviewed sooner but i was waiting for a phone call yesterday.

oh by the way i have been writing a smilar story like this at the start of Novemember different parings its Ginny/ Oliver wood and set when ginnys in her 20's...i dont think ill have it done by this month or the next i am only at the start of my draft all 57 pages of it but when i do post it on ff.net its not graphic in anyway i dont know why just didnt know adultfanfiction.net exsisted its gonna be posted on ff.net ill let you know, thats if you dont mind of course.

oh what was i going to say i love Pansy she is evil and she's been well done no doubt you have known a bitch lol

cheers Kayy waiting for the next chapter!

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I LOVE IT!! i jus read the whole thing today and i cant wait for you to continue!!!! could u possibly email me wen u update? if not ill jus keep checkin...

once again....I LOOOOOOVE IT!!! hehe =)

damn you are fast, like it, you know i do, i will keep reading, i want find out who the father is.bye bye

Hey, lol my lil Graco , "the bouncing feret" should have more a less explained his tourment i mean ...you could have a whole new story on this well on draco's physcological mindset...i.e. the belief that woman are just sex and well we know what lucius thinks of the weasleys, try giving draco depth to what he's saying to ginny. I mean dialogue is just words if there's no reason to them. Here ill give you an example k (promise not to laugh)

Draco stared at the new team mate, that Puddlemere United had sighned up just two days ago. Every ounce of enegry ripped and tore inside him to see her womanly curves, her red hair...thoes eyes...that smile. It made draco want to roll up and die to see her standing there laughing, laughing with another man that wasn't him. Draco however smiled, it was unusual for him to smile...from the tourmenting pain he was still dealing with, "At least she's not with Potter." said draco to no one inparticluar. (please no one steal that)

it gives more reason to his reactions, Ginny doesnt nescarily need to know everything dracos thinking, it makes him more misunderstood and mysterious. i mean you wrote that ginny was like a drug to him...well ginny doesnt need to know that and it might even cause more friction between the characters...Personally i dont think Ginny understands Draco herself. but more to the point of ginny being a drug to him...sometimes doing is way more Powerfully then saying. I guess for me personally i thought draco was a bit of blabbering git with that long dialogue i have always seen draco as a man who keeps his feelings to himslef.

Okay so i have blabbered on about depth in characterisation and the next bit!

there are two reasons why i have forgiven your spelling mistakes:
1. you do update fast
2. my fave name is kayla lol... i would call my future daughter kayla but her godmother most likely would be my bf's bestfriends girlfriend and her names kayla

shit, i guess this is why my mum tells me to wear my glasses...well the up above review was um from me rasie14 lol u can email me of course if you liked... anybody serisouly i have no life right now...my man at a army base! *weeps*
kk wont bother you all now

Anna