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Oh I need chapter 33! Is the book there? Or did Lucius give it to Voldemort already? Can Harry master it this quickly?

Wow! A whole chapter without dialogue! Good job! ;) lol. Has your mood been different the last couple days? I can't place it, but your style seems a little "off" the last two chapters. Still good stuff, and obviously you...did your puppy die? J/K!! I hope this didn't happen! O.O

I'm sooo glad there are no dead puppies!!! *wipes brow* I don't like dead puppies.

This was another great chapter. I know what the right suit does to a guy. *drools*

hoo, mama! that was HOT!!!!! loved the rimming scene with harry and draco in the classroom. and i can just see harry looking oh-so-hot in head to toe black. yum! i havent read in awhile, so i had a few chapters to catch up on. loved the visit with narcissa. very cool. though i wonder what exactly is wrong with her. does she have a terrible illness? and i really like how you are showing slytherin house slowly come together as a real house, bonded by friendship. a nice, slow, steady pace, very realistic. i know the upcoming Kiss for Lucius will be a hard scene to read, but if anyone deserves it, its lucius! thank god draco has harry to help him through it. maybe now draco will be able to set his demons to rest. i was a bit surprised that draco went to hogsmeade alone after harry's vision--and that harry let him! good thing nothing happened! looking forward to future chapters!

Chapter 31: Draco's emotional growth is a wonder to behold. The pillow fight was a great touch. Harry's dressing up was a lovely gift to take Draco's mind off of his father's sentencing.

hall away from the lunchroom ... I don't think there's a lunchroom in the Castle, but I do know they usually eat in the Great Hall.

Imperious ... If you're talking about the curse, it's Imperius. (www.hp-lexicon.org)

If something possesses another thing, you need an apostrophe "s" ('s) at the end: Draco's boyfriend; Hermione's books; etc. An exception: If you refer to a general thing possessing something, you use "its"; "it's" is the contraction of "it is"

Dear Gods and Goddesses above! I had almost had a heart attack-that was SO hot!!
O_O!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
The visuals were just too much! First off-I almost wet myself at Harry's outfit! Usually,
the "new wardrobe" drill is that Harry wears a silk, emerald shirt... yaddayaddayadda.
But NOT your Harry! He's in ALL black and his hair!! GAH....... I mimicked Draco. My
brain went dead. n_n And second... it was such a turn on how you left the boys mostly
dressed for their love scene! Draco's thong-eeeee!! And the rim job! This chapter was
so kinky-romantic it was devine! Thanks for sharing again. Please let Harry wear the
outfit just a little bit longer?? And maybe there could be a scene where Draco dresses
in another slutty thong for Harry and we see how "Boy Wonder" deals with that??
*beams* Fantastic job!!

(Watery smile) Beautiful... utterly beautiful... (Glomps Samayel) That was so BEAUTIFUL!!!! (Starts bawling...) No, just kidding, but--yeah... that's what I call ideal. Beautiful, perfect, dreamlike... To love as such is/should be, the ultimate goal of humanity. Never mind all this sodding WAR!!!!! (Fist pounds table in pissed off irritation.) *cough* Yes, well... I believe so anyway... Hem!! ^.--

Holy moly! Need chapter 32! That was awesome!

God, that was hot! I love speachless Draco!

EEEEEp!!!!!!!!! Just a quick writer-to-writer note!! It never quite works when the word "globe(s)" are used to describe an ass or breast(s). A globe is perfectly round, not a half sphere attached to anything. Much better to use "rounded, swell, muscled, lean, firm, lush... etc..." ass/breast(s). Unless the person in question got too close to a weed wacker doing something REALLY kinky that I wish to know nothing about, it is unnecessary to outline the fact of that anatimical bit-o'-love being naturally as it is. Adding description helps readers picture just HOW the article in question may look, ie) fit, tight, lax, flabby, muscled, squeeze-that-please-'cause-if-you-don't-"I"-will!! Whatever... Just thought I might add my 2 cents... Pardon the English rant, you inadvertantly struck a nerve...

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Incidentally... Dear GOD, FUCKING H.O.T!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
(Sets up Samayel shrine & begins burning incense in a tiny intricately carved Chinese Jade burner...) HEM!!! Thank you... ^.--