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for Life

by BrandonJackson

person Anon
schedule January 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ok before i finish this chapter i just have toget this outa the way... replace 'men' with 'man' for crying out loud!!!!!!

'oh men these are good' is so stupid

its---- 'oh man, these are good'

sorry if i sound rude *blushes*
person thrnbrooke
schedule December 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
So what happens next? It's a little hard to read but its interesting. Have you thought about looking into a beta?
person Slytheringirl
schedule December 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting piece of writing, but also very rushed, could have been longer i think