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for The Trip

by smallyuy

person Kelly Zuerlein
schedule November 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
update please
K.
person XX
schedule September 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Please continue soon!! I want to read more of your story, and how Severus and Harry get together!!
person Raie
schedule January 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Yeah! Good story line with lots of potential. Can't wait for more. Love Harry's "friend". What next? :)
person Lakoma
schedule January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Decent start, however you are in need of a beta to correct spelling and grammar. You get your tenses mixed up from time to time. I'm looking forward to more.
person Sophia
schedule January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
A marvelous story and I can' wait to read more; I really want to see what happens when Harry and Severus wake up, lol. Keep up the very good work and please update soon.
person Anijade
schedule January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ok you have real potential but you really need a BETA you also need to pick a tense to write in. Most people prefer reading in past tense 3rd person. If you have any questions about what I have posted feel free to email me. Right now this story is very hard to read.
person Jaima
schedule January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was a riot!
person brittany
schedule January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wonderful update!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
person Sal
schedule January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ack... now you HAVE TO update soon! More more more!
person Bif
schedule January 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You need a grammar review. Please use whole sentences and don't change tenses.