rate_review Reviews

I would love to see more of this story too please

mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmooooooooooooooooooooorrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Lovely thus far. Really, it is!

Only thing is, I didn't think that one needed deffense against Darts, maybe minor if you're going with the older darts that are made out of metal. I fell over laughing at reading that. Also, now, I'm not very knowledgable in human anatomy, but I'm pretty sure that we don't have any part of our bodies named "nibbles". Perhaps nipples, but not nibbles. (Unless you're one of those people with the kink to name body parts.) Just some things I thought I should point out.

Please do continue with this story.

Some minor grammar/spelling errors, but they don't effect the gist of your story. So Severus and Harry are already a couple and things are going down hill fast! Sounds like fun! Welcome to Adult Fan Fiction. Thanks for writing and sharing your stories.

yay! i hope its a boy! and if it has to be a girl name her raven!

This looks very promising. I like very much the pregnant Severus stories!
I hope you will update soon.
Lenea