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January 4, 2010 at 12:00 AM
please continue!!!!! not enough of these types around!!!
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May 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
great story idea. but where is the rest of it? lol.
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July 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow i just found this story ang i love it .. please please please update soon i would love to read more ..later for now
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June 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is a wonderful story. this is the 1st of it kind I have ever came across
Please continue to write. I and the rest of your readers will be wating.
Please continue to write. I and the rest of your readers will be wating.
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February 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Intresting idea, now if you can pull it off without completly murdering the SS they have known for 6 years i will be impressed. If you can make it believable..
I suggest making the chapters longer if you wish to continue this one..such short chapters rarely have enough plot in them to keep you wanting more!
Please continue this, this is a direction i have not seen a HP fanfic not go yet. I can't wait to see what challenges there will be now with V gone and everyone thinking thier problems are over. Stay creative with this one!!!
Also, granted i know i'm being hypocritcal considering this post in itself is grammatical murder, please get someone to beta you to help you change around things that are worded strangly and help with spelling and whatnot.
I know i can't spell or write well :P thats why i simply read fanfic instead of write it!! Its just destracting from the story, makes it not flow..
Now i guess thats the end of my drabble review...please continue with this you have a lot of potential!!
I suggest making the chapters longer if you wish to continue this one..such short chapters rarely have enough plot in them to keep you wanting more!
Please continue this, this is a direction i have not seen a HP fanfic not go yet. I can't wait to see what challenges there will be now with V gone and everyone thinking thier problems are over. Stay creative with this one!!!
Also, granted i know i'm being hypocritcal considering this post in itself is grammatical murder, please get someone to beta you to help you change around things that are worded strangly and help with spelling and whatnot.
I know i can't spell or write well :P thats why i simply read fanfic instead of write it!! Its just destracting from the story, makes it not flow..
Now i guess thats the end of my drabble review...please continue with this you have a lot of potential!!
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February 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Meh, another thing! I like the incorperation of the Tattoo and nipple rings, though if you do go into the explanation of how she got them or if other characters go to get one done i would really appreciate it if you put atleast a small amount of stress on going to a PROFESSIONAL shop! Many teens read these stories and don't know the dangers of unprofessional tattoos, proper sanitation and the like. I noticed in one of your A/N you mentioned doing a tattoo for someone and i'm not meaning to offend you (if you are indeed someone who tattoos in their home) and also trying to not lecture but its something i feel strongly about after working in a tattoo/piercing studio. Please just don't let Harry and Hermionie decide to make some homemade machines and go nuts on everyone at a party you know.....meh......yeah...i'm lecturing aren't i?
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January 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
love it cant wait to read more so please please update soon thanks
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January 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey i am new to this site and wanted to tell it is a good story. Keep it up and update soon
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January 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Interesting ideas, just have to work on your grammar. Examples
"He thinks they're his" instead of "He thinks their his".
Capitals letters in the title.
"Lily" instead of "Lilly".
"He thinks they're his" instead of "He thinks their his".
Capitals letters in the title.
"Lily" instead of "Lilly".
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December 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Interesting!! I would like to see where this goes!!