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December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Luv it could u please update soon
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December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Okay.... You *definitely* have to keep up with this fic as well as FPP. Seriously. Wow... Hot. So very, very, very hot....
Ice water anyone?
Ice water anyone?
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December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Even before you made the subtle changes, this was a good start. As a writer myself, I always make a point of reading reviews and taking into account what those who've read think. But I'd never go back and change a chapter (even slightly) after I've posted it. You've done a marvelous job of writing smut, and I truly hope you keep it up. But write what you think works, not what others tell you. :)
Bek
Bek
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December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow that was great i cant wait to read more so please update soon and same with your other story
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December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
o.o.....wow......lol are you sure you didn't write a lemon sometime in your sleep? cause i don't believe that is the work of an amature...it was absolutely fantabulous!! and i love D/Hr/B fics!!! but this one is different from all the other ones i've read so kudos to you!!
keep it comming *winks* great work and i can't wait to read the B/Hr goodness!!
Ada
keep it comming *winks* great work and i can't wait to read the B/Hr goodness!!
Ada
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December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is cute. I really like how this is going so far. I do hope you continue because I want to see how Draco will get Hermione for Blaise. Very, very good so far.
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December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You know me - Im a critic, so here is what I think about this:
1) "Beside him Draco Malfoy regarded him evilly as he tightened his grip on Blaise
1) "Beside him Draco Malfoy regarded him evilly as he tightened his grip on Blaise
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December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It's great. No overcompensation at all. In fact, I think it was a little undercompensated, as far as detail into their thoughts.
Sami
Sami
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December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like b/hr and d/hr and d/b/hr and i like your style of writing tremendously. I like that the smut you write isn't vulgur and is as classy as smut can get. I hope you continue and i would read it if you did
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December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very nice, I agree with Daniel about seeing a bit more of the emotion behind their Dialogue, but other than that I liked it a lot and I'ld like to see more.