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for Pain (Rewritten)

by ForcekillMiki

person WitchbladeHell
schedule September 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I haven't read the first version of this story, but... you say you have a Beta, but it really doesn't look like it. There are spelling, grammatical and structural mistakes everywhere.

Here's a tip: if your going to have someone check your spelling make sure they know how to spell.
person joanna
schedule September 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hi, i just read your story and i like it
i hope you do a other one
i can't waith to see what's
going to have been next time
person Aeolua
schedule July 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OMFG! You HAVE to continue! That was awseome! PLEASE update soon!
person Maria jOao
schedule July 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love it..please continue
person Morbid_Incubus
schedule July 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This has great potential but was very hard to follow. A lot of commas, many unneeded, jumps around a bit, missing words and sentences that make little sense. May I reccommend getting a beta?

-Mew
person Sophia
schedule July 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
A very interesting story. I love fics where Severus is the one to rescue Harry. I can't wait to see what happens next. Keep up the very good work.~Sophia
person andie
schedule January 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Good! Update soon, please please
person brittany
schedule December 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
please please please update soon
this story so far is amazing
person Sitt
schedule December 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I dont remember if I post last time or not but that was the hardest chapter I have gone through... you have me in tears :'(... it's well written but so so sad.
person JJ
schedule December 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Boy, things just keep getting worse and worse for the "bloody boy who lived!" In this case, it seems all of his name applys. What else will Poppy tell us???