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Hey I love your story pain please finish it or tell me if you have finished it somewhere else thanks

please....oh please.... tell me you are writing more

this really good.

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More please. I really hope Harry recovers. When will Severus fall in love with him? Poor Harry. When did he start getting raped. If it was before he went to Hogwarts, then I hope Severus gets to kill those bastards. I think you should make Harry only trust Severus for a while. It would make sense since Sev was the one who saved him. He should latch onto Sev and Sev should be the one that Harry tells what happened to. Well, please update soon. I really enjoyed this story so far and would love to see it continued. I might have already reviewed for this, but I'm not sure. Well, I hope I inspired you to update, if not, well, please update anyway.

I really want to see whats gonna happen!!!!I had read this a few weeks ago....I hadn't thought it was going to continue...Please update again soon....I like where it is going! Thank you for writing! Have a good one! Jasper

MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I like your story so far, it looks to be headed down a slightly unusual route but nothing's wrong with that.

I do suggest you get a beta and/or a better spell/grammar checker. I noticed that you seem to be uncertain about the correct use of a comma. A simple rule of thumb I was taught was that they are breath points when reading aloud. The other problem I have is the misuse of various words, whilst they are phonetically correct you have used the wrong written version. I've used the word you used then the correct spelling in the context of your story.
site = location, eg building site, battlefield site; sight = view, vision eg 'he had never seen his mentor so mad before. It was quite a scary site' should read 'he had never seen his mentor so mad before. It was quite a scary sight'
ruff = 1) several types of birds or fish or 2) a piece of starched frill worn round the neck during the 16th century; rough = uneven, boisterous, coarse, indelicate, unfinished, unpleasant or just plain bl__dy nasty. 'he is still not out of the ruff at the time' or 'he is still not out of the rough at the time';
waist = the bit where you bend located between hips and ribs; waste = garbage, rubbish, unwanted, trash or in the context concerned = wastepaper bin, circular filing system, rubbish bin etc. 'the other was heaving up in a waist paper basket' or 'wastepaper basket';

this is awesome.........what happened to harry is sad, but i enjoy this.i have read many stories and this is very well written,i hope you continue it soon.

hello. While i hate to think of anyone in that sort of pain, fictional or not, i love harry?snape fics. please hurry with the next chapter. and also try not to make it so short. its frustrating to read a short chapter only to wait a week for the next. please.

I really like this story and I can't wait to see what happens next. Keep up the really great work.

Poor Harry! More soon?