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January 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Well that was an evil place to leave us... although you do know how to leave your readers thirsty for more. I thought there was more to Yuki than meets the eye. And as for Draco well, the snake spell was really a fine piece of work that he is certainly most deserving of. I can't wait for the next chapter. I too start school so I know how that can be. See you in the next, Hanna
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January 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh, of course. I'll find you somewhere. I'm entr0pique. When I do, you'll have no need to email me here anymore. As the the email thing there's a lovely thing called an address book. It'll save you lots of time. I'm sure you have a setting where you can group all of us into one huge folder, yes?
Anyway back the reviewing.
You have a lovely style. The magnititude of intensity of chapter 8 (don't think I was updated for that chapter) left me shaking, and yet your prose is all so easy, so simple, calm. There appears to be nothing special to it, but it is in fact lovely, lovely writing.
The enchanted garden was lush with life and as Hermione stood upon a small flag stone path in the middle of the garden, she glanced up to see an overcast winter sky. Snow was falling like tiny angelic feathers from the clouds, but did not reach the warm ground of the garden
That was a beautiful, beautiful picture you painted for us. You do have a way with expression. And as soon as you drew this picture for us it's ripped to shreds and the darkness of the previous chapter returns, catching us in the unawares.
Great job in your portrayal of Draco. He's almost like Tom Riddle in many ways, but Draco and something else, something monsterous and sinister.
The way Hermione reacted what not how I expected it, but I suppose it's very fitting. I like the way how she does not skip the pleasentries even when she's threatening him.
Yuri completely caught me off guard. I can't wait until you develop more of a relationship and connection between them. There's obviously much more going on.
The ending was WOW. So very creative and utterly brilliant. AMAZING.
I forgot to mention in my previous review that I like how you approached Draco and Hermione. They're both crippled. It's very rare that you find fanon cripples in fanfic because writers like to hang on to the illusions that Draco and Hermione are perfect, gorgeous people- not one spot or freckle (unless they're a Weasley ;) ), highly well endowed and such all because they're fictional. They both fought a war. People die in wars, they get crippled and wounds and endure horrors. You made them very human in this aspect, easier to sympathize with. Though war is a touchy subject for many people, myself included, you don't glamorize it in anyway and for that I thank you.
Anyway back the reviewing.
You have a lovely style. The magnititude of intensity of chapter 8 (don't think I was updated for that chapter) left me shaking, and yet your prose is all so easy, so simple, calm. There appears to be nothing special to it, but it is in fact lovely, lovely writing.
The enchanted garden was lush with life and as Hermione stood upon a small flag stone path in the middle of the garden, she glanced up to see an overcast winter sky. Snow was falling like tiny angelic feathers from the clouds, but did not reach the warm ground of the garden
That was a beautiful, beautiful picture you painted for us. You do have a way with expression. And as soon as you drew this picture for us it's ripped to shreds and the darkness of the previous chapter returns, catching us in the unawares.
Great job in your portrayal of Draco. He's almost like Tom Riddle in many ways, but Draco and something else, something monsterous and sinister.
The way Hermione reacted what not how I expected it, but I suppose it's very fitting. I like the way how she does not skip the pleasentries even when she's threatening him.
Yuri completely caught me off guard. I can't wait until you develop more of a relationship and connection between them. There's obviously much more going on.
The ending was WOW. So very creative and utterly brilliant. AMAZING.
I forgot to mention in my previous review that I like how you approached Draco and Hermione. They're both crippled. It's very rare that you find fanon cripples in fanfic because writers like to hang on to the illusions that Draco and Hermione are perfect, gorgeous people- not one spot or freckle (unless they're a Weasley ;) ), highly well endowed and such all because they're fictional. They both fought a war. People die in wars, they get crippled and wounds and endure horrors. You made them very human in this aspect, easier to sympathize with. Though war is a touchy subject for many people, myself included, you don't glamorize it in anyway and for that I thank you.
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January 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Sorry I didn't review the last chapter, love, but Auntie was busy with adventures at home. This is soooo exciting! (claps hands delightedly). Draco walking the edge of madness, falling off, and seemingly trying to take Hermione with him, and then Yuki (who sounds totally hot, by the way)... honey, Auntie loves! Oh, this is so...well, I'm completely enrapt, and hopelessly addicted, and will patiently wait for the next installment.
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January 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hi,
I must say this is on of the best fics I`ve read so far.
It is really interesting and the way you portrait Malfoy is nearly the exact same way I would do it.
I hope you have enough time during spring term to write more, as I cannot await it.
Greetings
I must say this is on of the best fics I`ve read so far.
It is really interesting and the way you portrait Malfoy is nearly the exact same way I would do it.
I hope you have enough time during spring term to write more, as I cannot await it.
Greetings
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January 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ok so wow UPDATE NOW. i'm not kidding. i can not tell you how much i'm loving this story. please please please update soon. please.
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January 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Action-packed and as wonderful as usual! Yuki is even more of an interesting character than I thought before. He certainly lives up to the legend of his sire, hey?
One question though--In Hermione's post-war explanation to bound-up Draco, she pronounced out "Malfoy Manor." If she was afraid before to actually call Draco "Malfoy," then shouldn't the phrase "Malfoy Manor" bring about the same effect?
One question though--In Hermione's post-war explanation to bound-up Draco, she pronounced out "Malfoy Manor." If she was afraid before to actually call Draco "Malfoy," then shouldn't the phrase "Malfoy Manor" bring about the same effect?
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January 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ok so i think i just reviewed the first chapter and i meant to review this one. or the last one or whatever. i'm not really sure how the whole reviewing system works on here cause i never review. but this... this was worth a review. i honestly think i'm on love with this story. so please. just please update soon. please.
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January 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
yay what a great chapter.
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January 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is one of the best Draco/Hermione stories I have read yet. You protray them wonderfully!!! I hope you do get to update soon!
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January 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
How exciting! I'm glad that Hermione got a chance to get back at Malfoy if only for a while. I also LOVE the direction you are taking with Yuki's character! He started out as this nice person and now we're really getting to see behind his mask. Two hot boys *swoon*. Very nice!