rate_review Reviews

it was so nice to see that you finally completed this story! It actually had the perfect ending! I loved the whole thing and you did and absoultly amazing job! Can't wait to read your next masterpiece!

I just wanted to say around the part where the babies turned back into dolls i actually started to cry because it just seemed so emotiional lol awesome story and great job

OK Chapter two and I'm still convulsing from the giggles ("I want grandchildren." HAHA I reacted just like Draco did when my mom told me this not too long ago). This is great, I can already tell it is going to be one of my favorite stories on AFF. :-D

Yup I was so right, one of my favorites. *sniffs and grabs a tissue* I am such a sucker for happy endings :-) Thank you for a lovely story.

Ick and Ack..lovely.
I have been searching for this story since AFF.net went through that big revamp and was down for a month or so.
Today i was looking through the latest list and someone had written a story of a similar idea and one of the reviewers reccomended this one. I'm so glad i finally found it and could read teh last chapters!
This story is truely wonderful. Do you archive it elsewhere?

Excellent!

I really enjoyed your story! I've been checking for updates all year and have not been disappointed once!

I LOVE THIS STORY!!! It's so sweet! There's not really much to say other than that it's amazing!

hi.

well I want to start by saying that I really like this fiction, in fact its become a favorite. It has comedy, romance, dialogue, and the characters are true to the books, something I feel is very important for a fiction to have. You're a great writer and storyteller.

But, I think that the story up to this point begins to wobble a little bit. I have a few comments about this chapter. It's a little random in Michael's introduction in the story. He doesn't seem like a necessary character and at this point is a Mary Jane type, perfect in every which way. Once he is introduced the whole story seems more like a soap opera than a harry potter fanfiction.

I don't favor the way Draco written to act in this chapter-- personally, I think Draco would use verbal wit than physical force. It's those two things that bothered me most about this chapter. Don't misinterpret me, I think your storywriting is lovely, but the plot needs a little work. The plot very strong at the beginning of this story, but you see it start to weaken in this chapter. The introductions of characters are somewhat blunt, such as the Greek monster and Michael. My suggestion would be to introduce one and stay with it. Use that to continue your story. Everything else (character development, dialogue, etc.) is very well done.

I love it. Lovelovelove loved it! :)