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June 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
loving it please update!
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December 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
really good story so far
please update soon
please update soon
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December 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This seems so sad. Will things get better? Is Severus in a relationship with Remus? Is Harry in one with a Weasley?
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December 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
why the hell is sev with remus? ick. harry and sev forever. they better get together soon. and we know they don't really hate each other. i hope there will be lots and lots of yummy angst! ^_- *wink*
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December 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good start - is Liam their son as well, that Harry had after he left? I hope they get back together..
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December 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Things are getting interesting.
I find it hard to believe that Harry
would run out on his son, but so far
the reasons as to why he did what he
did are good. I hope you keep up the
good work and please don't make Harry
or Snape the bad guy in this. I hope it is
all just a big misunderstanding. Anwyas I
can't wait to read more. -Cheers - Mashell
I find it hard to believe that Harry
would run out on his son, but so far
the reasons as to why he did what he
did are good. I hope you keep up the
good work and please don't make Harry
or Snape the bad guy in this. I hope it is
all just a big misunderstanding. Anwyas I
can't wait to read more. -Cheers - Mashell
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December 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Interesting beginning. Although you could have put both chapters together and still had a short chapter.
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December 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
If Troy is 14 in 2010, then he was born in 1996. It follows then that the parent who carried him became pregnant in 1995 when Harry was only 15. The other child then was born when Harry was 21 if he is now 9. So why does Troy not know who Harry is?
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December 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh, forgot to add something. They were bonded in 1996, so Harry couldn't have been pregnant in 1995. Troy should have been born in 1997. (Harrys birthday is in July and he wouldn't have been 16 til July of '96)
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December 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Your story is great so far, but the editing needs some working over. More paragraphs, for example. I know its partly affnets fault, but storys are much easier to read with good editing.