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That was wonderful! Let's have some more!

Please add it! Please, please, please! I want to know what happens next! The first part was really good! I truly enjoyed it, so please put the next part out. Pretty please?

HI, I want the other half ASAP, Ilive this fic. It's new and I want to know if this love making will save Harry or if he will be dying loved. I hope the first will be right!!!! But it's your story and I will like it as it will be.
Thanks Phoenix 5

You are an amazing writer! What can I say, I love the way you capture his feelings (even if it is ooc) and they way I'm taken in by the most unlikely story. I mean how likely is it that everyone knows he will give Snape a blowjob and how likely is it that Ron cheers him on but it works here. And coming from me that is saying alot. I am too picky with HP/SS stories for it to be good for me. It's not normal for me to enjoy "fluffy all lovvie Snapie" but here I do. (see I even think this story us fluffy!Snape you can see I set my standards high)
I'm looking forward the end of this and all the stories I hope you will give us in the future.

Looking it over, you have a lot of formatting mistakes as well as misplaced commas and tens mixups. I would look for one who is good at that sort of betaing. If you are willing to wait a bit, I may be willing to do a bit as my break is coming up, but I tend to be more formal than a fan fic writer and do not like pure smut which this piece does not seem too bad at.

It is apparent on a thorough reading that your grammar is not wonderful, but I did not realize it when I was just reading it for enjoyment.

Good start, especially if english is not your first language.

Always,

Ariyana

This is quite a different story and I can't wait to see what happens next, especially with Harry's health and with Harry and Severus's budding "relationship," if that's the word for it. Keep up the very good work and please update soon.

Despite some spelling errors, the stream of consciousness style is fascinating. I also like first person Snape. Please do add the next half.

Nice, hope you update with the second quickly.

yea, do the 2nd half. i liked it.

Well this isnt really my cup of tea, But it is really well written and I would read the other half when you write it. Oh yeah and your hot and i love you!