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re- chap 40 youw anted an opinion so here it is.

It really depends on how you want to develop Hermione and then keep it consistent with the rest of the story. In my mind Hermione wouldn't force Snape into being a dishonest lover. This reminds me of a star trek episode with Q, where a girl had powers to make Riker lover her, but then she decided the false love was not what she wanted, She wanted it of free will. And isn't that the theme of this story? The desire to live of one's free will. I would expect her to continue to want to protect Snape in some regard, he is really he only ally at this point. Also, you could have Snape want to kiss her at some point but not out of sympathy but becasue he was caught up in the feelings. What would be interesting and youstated this inthe chapter was Hermiones thoughts concerning Snape and the fact he is under the influence. If she can indeed cure unforgivables, perhaps she can cure the most unforgivable of all. That Snape despite his darkness would take a hit for her, one emitted by Albus. SHe may loose her powers to do this, then Snape will owe her inthe biggest way, but it will be done out of free will, not obligation.

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just to add,..though you still want to keep snape in control a bit, since the readers or some i am sure would want snape still in some type of control.. but thats just me.

No, I don't think she should force Snape to do those things.. I can't really think of what she SHOULD do, though.

Voldie weaves a seductive tale...

Wow. That just shed Voldemort in a whole new light. (no pun intended)

Ch 40 - PS - even if he gives her the "gentle" for a bit, I think she has outgrown much of the need for it. She's a powerful Primordial, not a baby - she should realize that soon. Also, by demanding Severus do something he doesn't want, she should realize she's in danger of becoming a new dictator, just as bad as Voldy and Dumbly - so she needs Severus to stand up to her. Perhaps they can take turns dishing it out to the other.

It was more than satisfactory :-) it was great! I love this fic - I havn't seen another fic like it. you are great :-) I can't wait for the next chapter :-)

I think that, all brutality aside, he's always been mostly honest with her. And I think that sexually, their tastes suit each other. I don't think she'd really like if he were all tender and etc. In fact, you could possibly let her finally acknowledge this fact, by initially perhaps trying to force a gentler lovemaking, and realize it's not doing anything for her. Then, allow him to be "who he is," but make her assert that part of herself more, and force him to realize that his "brutal" nature does, in fact, please her and give her pleasure. In this way, she is no longer "submitting" to his treatment of her, but maybe becoming more reciprocal. I think the struggle for dominance between the two of them is very interesting. Perhaps the tables can be turned on him, in that respect.



You initially posited that she yearned for him to dominate her because she was under so much pressure to perform at the demands of others (Dumbledore, etc.). Now, she is in a situation where she needs to take control of her self/powers in order to overcome the dictates of others. Sexual assertiveness would be a part of that, I think. However, unless she wishes to become his master (i.e. the equivalent of a Voldemort/Dumbledore in bed), I think she and Snape need to strive for a balance. It doesn't have to be a kissy-kissy balance, but a balance all the same. Am I making sense?

Aw I hope Ron gets over it. Their friendship should be stronger than that. :( Sad to see he's totally brainwashed by his anger.

Thanks for the super awesome prompt updates. You're awesome!