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September 17, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Ch 13: Intriguing story so far! Sometimes (not just in Ch 13) it is unclear whether the text is describing how Hermione feels/thinks, or it is third-party narration for the benefit of the readers. For example,
"...She had quite an aptitude for spell enhancement and development. Actually, this was the capacity Albus intended to use her for. ..."
It is unclear whether Hermione was aware that Albus intended to use her for spell development: in other words, somewhat aware of Albus' scheme; or it is merely thiry-party narration for the readers to understand Albus' scheme.
"...She had quite an aptitude for spell enhancement and development. Actually, this was the capacity Albus intended to use her for. ..."
It is unclear whether Hermione was aware that Albus intended to use her for spell development: in other words, somewhat aware of Albus' scheme; or it is merely thiry-party narration for the readers to understand Albus' scheme.
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February 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful story, I'm going for the first of the epilogues! Thanks for the great story!
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January 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I love your dark Snape! Although by chapter 30, Hermione was becoming too omnipotent so I was losing interest in the story. However, in chapter 31, you deftly inserted new tension by having Snape tell Hermione in no uncertain terms that he did not welcome any romantic feelings from Hermione. Now I can look forward to Hermione's struggle to overcome Snape's nature (that he is evil and without emotions of love/kindness). I do love the kinkiness of your lemons too.
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September 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
haha sweet I love stories where where Hermione turns into a powerful Witch and I liked the alternate ending very much x33 I hope yo find more stories like this so I will probably be looking in your stories No doubt you have some delicious ones in there till then
(Kitten)<^-^<)
(Kitten)<^-^<)
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August 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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August 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
The alternate ending leaves me breathless and with just two things to say:
First: nobody can write lemons like you!!!
Second: excuse me now, I have to change my knickers *gg*
First: nobody can write lemons like you!!!
Second: excuse me now, I have to change my knickers *gg*
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July 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OH MY GOD. that was HOT. loved it. my mission is now to find more of your stories and hope to hell that they are as AMAZINGLY WONDERFUL as this one. it took me a couple days to finish it, but damn, it was worth it. and I'm very glad that you added the alternate ending.
have a wonderful time writing!!
Andy
have a wonderful time writing!!
Andy
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April 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i'm not sure how i missed this story but I did.. and I'm so sorry I didnt read it before.. it was.. raunchy, hot, intense, amazing and OH BOY! lol Great work!
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February 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
wow that was hot. I read all the chapters in one sitting because I couldn't step away I also liked the way you ended it. I don't think it would have been the same for Snape to all of a sudden declare his love for her. Great Job!!
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January 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!