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June 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
come on pleace don't make us wait another year for you to finish this story.
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June 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
the story is really great i love reading it . if u could email me when the new chapt. is up my email is serene_legolas@hotmail.com
thank u
thank u
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February 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hurry with the next chapter please
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February 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
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January 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hello!
I'm new on this site;
I enjoy this story... The characters fit well. (I do not know if I express myself clearly beacause I'm French so I'm not writing or speaking English so well... but I read it pretty well!).
Can we have more of this story pleeeeeaaaaaaassssseeee?????
As you say, plaese feel free to e-mail me when you edit a new chapter(s????)
With my best XOXO...
Sofisss
I'm new on this site;
I enjoy this story... The characters fit well. (I do not know if I express myself clearly beacause I'm French so I'm not writing or speaking English so well... but I read it pretty well!).
Can we have more of this story pleeeeeaaaaaaassssseeee?????
As you say, plaese feel free to e-mail me when you edit a new chapter(s????)
With my best XOXO...
Sofisss
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January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
please up date soon I would like to find out how the dinner at mione's goes and I would like to see how their relationship progresses.
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January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'l like to get an email when you update:) really interesting story
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January 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hmmm...why wait? Is unbeted one still on net?
I am going to read it! :*
wonderfull chapter, love, wonderfull :*
I am going to read it! :*
wonderfull chapter, love, wonderfull :*
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January 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Gads! I like the way that this story is progressing, but if you cliff it again I'll hunt you down with Fluffy's help. Just kidding. I love this story, update soon. Thank you.
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January 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'm enjoying this story. Whirlwind courtship indeed. And Severus not sharing his brandy. Tsk tsk. lol
A small con/crit. When someone is speaking and another person reacts to whatever was said, they need to be separate paragraphs.
Bad Ex. "Potter, what do you think you're doing?" Harry winced. (The first thing I think is 'Why is Harry calling himself Potter?' Which makes for confusing reading.)
The example should read:
"Potter, what do you think you're doing?"
Harry winced.
There are a good many sentences that need to be separated in your story. But, a problem easily fixed. Keep writing. Is Severus' family going to pull something? Will the Potter-Snapes survive the Weasley Inquisition? Will they ever get to have sex without interuption? ;)
A small con/crit. When someone is speaking and another person reacts to whatever was said, they need to be separate paragraphs.
Bad Ex. "Potter, what do you think you're doing?" Harry winced. (The first thing I think is 'Why is Harry calling himself Potter?' Which makes for confusing reading.)
The example should read:
"Potter, what do you think you're doing?"
Harry winced.
There are a good many sentences that need to be separated in your story. But, a problem easily fixed. Keep writing. Is Severus' family going to pull something? Will the Potter-Snapes survive the Weasley Inquisition? Will they ever get to have sex without interuption? ;)