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September 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 6:
What terrified me was the description of Draco having to wait for the coming punishment. And that he finally realized that Lucius was doing it on purpose.
I think everybody knows that kind of feeling of waiting for something really bad to happen, nothing can prevent it. The fear is dreadful. And it gets worse the longer it lasts. *sigh*
I liked Draco's halluncinations of Snape being there. Although it was just an imagination, it helped Draco through his horrible beating. Ah yes, the human mind can be very helpful at times.
Now I definitely hate Lucius! And I want some severe punishment soon for him!
If you let me, I can think up some gruesome things *evil glint in eyes*
What terrified me was the description of Draco having to wait for the coming punishment. And that he finally realized that Lucius was doing it on purpose.
I think everybody knows that kind of feeling of waiting for something really bad to happen, nothing can prevent it. The fear is dreadful. And it gets worse the longer it lasts. *sigh*
I liked Draco's halluncinations of Snape being there. Although it was just an imagination, it helped Draco through his horrible beating. Ah yes, the human mind can be very helpful at times.
Now I definitely hate Lucius! And I want some severe punishment soon for him!
If you let me, I can think up some gruesome things *evil glint in eyes*
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September 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 7:
Ah, comfort again! Draco's hero comes along and takes him away. Good!
Buth then the extent of Lucius evilness is becoming evident once more.
What kind of father can do that to a child??? The beating is bad enough, the indoctrination of being worthless is even worse - because the wounds on the mind probably will never heal. But if's that's not enough, Lucius deliberately makes Draco sick. WAH! One night at Azkaban isn't enough! Give ME a cane...
I'm curious if Draco will get cured later on and how. And will Narcissa really help? What's her role, anyway? Is she intimidated too? Or is she really THAT cool? What kind of mother can watch the abuse over years and do nothing?
Ah, comfort again! Draco's hero comes along and takes him away. Good!
Buth then the extent of Lucius evilness is becoming evident once more.
What kind of father can do that to a child??? The beating is bad enough, the indoctrination of being worthless is even worse - because the wounds on the mind probably will never heal. But if's that's not enough, Lucius deliberately makes Draco sick. WAH! One night at Azkaban isn't enough! Give ME a cane...
I'm curious if Draco will get cured later on and how. And will Narcissa really help? What's her role, anyway? Is she intimidated too? Or is she really THAT cool? What kind of mother can watch the abuse over years and do nothing?
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September 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter Two:
Ah, comfort. Thank you for this!
I liked Severus being Draco's godfather and finding out about Draco's injuries. I liked his disbelieve (although I couldn't quite imagine him shedding a tear, I have to admit, but never mind me). I liked Severus trying to persuade Draco to see a healer, but of course Draco didn't want to hear about THAT (oh no, abuse is something no one talks about, it never really happens, does it?).
I'm wondering about that nearly empty bottle... What kind of nightmares does Severus try to forget?
Ah, comfort. Thank you for this!
I liked Severus being Draco's godfather and finding out about Draco's injuries. I liked his disbelieve (although I couldn't quite imagine him shedding a tear, I have to admit, but never mind me). I liked Severus trying to persuade Draco to see a healer, but of course Draco didn't want to hear about THAT (oh no, abuse is something no one talks about, it never really happens, does it?).
I'm wondering about that nearly empty bottle... What kind of nightmares does Severus try to forget?
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September 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter Three:
Brr... I don't think it's a good idea of Draco to let his backside heal without a healer. I don't want to imagine how the skin will look like after healing on its own. Argh. You never mentioned it, but I hope Severus gave him some ointment for the wounds? Everytime Draco sits down I flinch because I fear the clothes will stick like glue to his skin. OUch, ouch, ouch!
Hm, I'm curious when Draco will see that he doesn't deserve any punishment. I'm sure it will take a long time, if ever. He's just a 12 year old kid and he never experienced anything else. When you are 12, the word of parents is law. And everything a parent does is right. I'm happy that you gave Draco the chance to find out that there can be a different way of life...
Brr... I don't think it's a good idea of Draco to let his backside heal without a healer. I don't want to imagine how the skin will look like after healing on its own. Argh. You never mentioned it, but I hope Severus gave him some ointment for the wounds? Everytime Draco sits down I flinch because I fear the clothes will stick like glue to his skin. OUch, ouch, ouch!
Hm, I'm curious when Draco will see that he doesn't deserve any punishment. I'm sure it will take a long time, if ever. He's just a 12 year old kid and he never experienced anything else. When you are 12, the word of parents is law. And everything a parent does is right. I'm happy that you gave Draco the chance to find out that there can be a different way of life...
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September 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*Screams* Does Lucius really deserve Draco's love and respect? Love, ok, a kid can't help loving his parent, regardless what he does. But respect? Ack! Sorry, I just forgot that Draco is 12 years old. But I could imagine, in years to come, the love will remain, but the respect will be gone.
Grr, I wish I could burn Lucius's back a little. Just a little...
Grr, I wish I could burn Lucius's back a little. Just a little...
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September 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter Five:
Brave Draco! It made me sigh deep when he made that decision! He couldn't do anything else.
So that was your original ending? I'm quite satisfied with it! The five chapters explains a lot. Draco's behaviour, his hate of Harry, his hate of Mudbloods and so on. Whilst reading the books, I always imagined something like this anyhow, I don't know why.
The original ending is very sad, but quite realistic. And although it's horrible, it still gives me hope. Maybe Lucius' punishments won't be as severe as before, he has a witness now. Severus will keep an open eye! And maybe Draco will learn to say "No!" But this is nonsense of course. Someone like Lucius can't help to go on... He will be more subtle, and he will terrify Draco even more. *deep sigh*
But you promised a new ending. Not canon, I'm happy to hear. For if it was, the abuse would continue. In book 6 and 7, Draco still tries desperately to please his father.
Now I'm curious about your new ending. Will Lucius get what HE deserves (I'm quite bloodthirsty now)? Will Severus be there to help Draco? And, what's more important, will Draco be able to knock his father off his podest and will he see him as the abuser he really is? Will he be able to say "No?" Will he be able to confide to "outsiders"?
Brave Draco! It made me sigh deep when he made that decision! He couldn't do anything else.
So that was your original ending? I'm quite satisfied with it! The five chapters explains a lot. Draco's behaviour, his hate of Harry, his hate of Mudbloods and so on. Whilst reading the books, I always imagined something like this anyhow, I don't know why.
The original ending is very sad, but quite realistic. And although it's horrible, it still gives me hope. Maybe Lucius' punishments won't be as severe as before, he has a witness now. Severus will keep an open eye! And maybe Draco will learn to say "No!" But this is nonsense of course. Someone like Lucius can't help to go on... He will be more subtle, and he will terrify Draco even more. *deep sigh*
But you promised a new ending. Not canon, I'm happy to hear. For if it was, the abuse would continue. In book 6 and 7, Draco still tries desperately to please his father.
Now I'm curious about your new ending. Will Lucius get what HE deserves (I'm quite bloodthirsty now)? Will Severus be there to help Draco? And, what's more important, will Draco be able to knock his father off his podest and will he see him as the abuser he really is? Will he be able to say "No?" Will he be able to confide to "outsiders"?
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September 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 1: Wow, what a chapter! Poor, poor Draco!
Now I see the scene in the infirmary in a completely different light. Especially Draco's behaviour - he isn't an attention seeker, but a desperate kid!
Lucius - oh, yes, I can very well imagine him being like this! The family's name is more important than his son's health and well being.
I enjoyed this chapter very much. Ok, "enjoyed" is maybe the wrong phrase - I was terrified and hated Lucius for doing this to Draco.
Now I see the scene in the infirmary in a completely different light. Especially Draco's behaviour - he isn't an attention seeker, but a desperate kid!
Lucius - oh, yes, I can very well imagine him being like this! The family's name is more important than his son's health and well being.
I enjoyed this chapter very much. Ok, "enjoyed" is maybe the wrong phrase - I was terrified and hated Lucius for doing this to Draco.
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July 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I spent the night rereading the whole story, and let me tell you: It's brilliant. The plot, the characterizations, the emotions. Everything just... It's so touching it made me cry. I think the amount of work you've put into this really payed off.
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July 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow was this awesome. Yeesh! I never thought I'd say this, but poor Draco. I'll look forward to more!
Christy
Christy
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July 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'm so happy you decided to continue your story - it's one of the best Snape & Draco fanfics out there, and I've loved every chapter of it. Although the bleak ending of Chapter 5 was only too realistic/logical, given the way Draco has been conditioned since childhood, I'm glad you decided to prolong your story and give us a little hope for a happier ending.
It is a testament to your talent that I found Chapter 6 too painful to read in one go. The horrifying torture Draco undergoes at his father's hands was so realistically depicted that I actually felt physically ill, and had to leave my computer screen a couple of times to calm down. I kept seeing pictures in my mind of a fragile 12-year-old child, helpless under the fists and wand of his monster of a sire (Lucius does not deserve the title of father!), and I couldn't stop crying. Nothing excuses abusing a child. Nothing. And when that thrice-damned Lucius insisted that he had never hit Draco without just cause I literarily saw red.
I think the most heartbreaking part of it all was seeing the little self-confidence Severus had managed to install in Draco slipping away bit by bit as the old conditioning took hold of him again, and he once more became convinced that he deserved his sire's punishment. And in the middle of his pain and fear his greatest concern is to protect his godfather... who said Slytherins can't be selfless?
As I've said before, Lucius is a mystery to me. In his conversation with his wife he seemed to show slight concern for Draco and indicate that he only punished his son to make sure his lesson "gets through", but to me he's definitely much too fond of applying said punishment. Using Unforgivables on a mere child, let alone your own son?!? And as for Narcissa... sneaking into Draco's room to give him water is a good start, but any husband of mine caught abusing my child would be lucky to find himself comparatively safe in Azkaban. *growls*
Please, please, Draco, press that Panic Button! If this isn't a life-or-death situation I don't know what is.
It is a testament to your talent that I found Chapter 6 too painful to read in one go. The horrifying torture Draco undergoes at his father's hands was so realistically depicted that I actually felt physically ill, and had to leave my computer screen a couple of times to calm down. I kept seeing pictures in my mind of a fragile 12-year-old child, helpless under the fists and wand of his monster of a sire (Lucius does not deserve the title of father!), and I couldn't stop crying. Nothing excuses abusing a child. Nothing. And when that thrice-damned Lucius insisted that he had never hit Draco without just cause I literarily saw red.
I think the most heartbreaking part of it all was seeing the little self-confidence Severus had managed to install in Draco slipping away bit by bit as the old conditioning took hold of him again, and he once more became convinced that he deserved his sire's punishment. And in the middle of his pain and fear his greatest concern is to protect his godfather... who said Slytherins can't be selfless?
As I've said before, Lucius is a mystery to me. In his conversation with his wife he seemed to show slight concern for Draco and indicate that he only punished his son to make sure his lesson "gets through", but to me he's definitely much too fond of applying said punishment. Using Unforgivables on a mere child, let alone your own son?!? And as for Narcissa... sneaking into Draco's room to give him water is a good start, but any husband of mine caught abusing my child would be lucky to find himself comparatively safe in Azkaban. *growls*
Please, please, Draco, press that Panic Button! If this isn't a life-or-death situation I don't know what is.