rate_review Reviews

Okay. I have mixed feelings about this chapter. Over all the progression was amazing, you took the characters to a place far and beyond what they were before and you moved the complexity of the story to an even higher notch. And dont get me wrong, i really truly love your story. But this chapter was missing something. I like your writing style, its one that i have only attempted to do so well as you have acomplished in this story.
But this chapter, it was too much. I think you took the chopiness a little too far. I love the disjointed feel, but this time it was... not even near complete. There were too many periods and stops and while i normally love that, you took it just that small step to far. The words were confused, the sentances were confused. And while i do believe you were trying for that at certain parts, i think that at others... you weren't, but did all the same.
I think that all of your other chapters were amazing, but i think you tried too hard on this one, you tried to make it disjointed instead of letting the story BE disjointed.
Im sorry, i dont know how to explain it, it just wasn't quite as shocking, hard hitting, or moving. The emotions were all there but your writing stoped them from taking that next step.

I still love your story. It is still my favorite story. I still can not wait for more to come, but I hope that my comments help you a little in bringing it back a little, and i hope that you understand what i am saying. I dont mean it as a criticsm against your work, more a critique, if there is a difference. I guess, instead of it being an insult I want it to be taken as a show of how much i love your story.

Even if you dont agree with me, for i could very well be wrong, I hope that this suggestion doesn't fall completely on deaf ears.

AND AGAIN AND AGAIN just so there is No mistake about it. Your story is amazing. Do keep up the beautiful work. I cant wait for more.

i love this story i never knew fanfiction existed until a friend told me about draco and hermione pairings on these sites i always loved the thought of those two together, i guess i am not the only one lol anyway many on here and other sites say that it takes a lot for them to get over their hate and all that time of fighting and what not. but i have to say that it doesn't always work that way. My husband and i have been married for about 6 years we have 2 beautiful children and we married about a little over year after we graduated high school... we also had hated each other for about 7 years (at least!) it was so much like draco and hermione in many ways. he was popular, a jock and wealthy. i was smart (strait a's never a b in my life lol), i was well liked just not by him, no sports what so ever, and my family may not be anywhere near poor it just wasn't near as much money as his family had. well long story short our senior year we got paired up for a project in english ( boy were we happy about that, not lol) we did nothing but argue about what author we wanted to do our project on. one saturday night he came over so we could finish it and my parents were at some dinner thing they had with their friends (they took my little brother and sister with them so i could get our work done). they knew how i felt about him so they "trusted me". so he came over we fought i told him to leave i had my room door open and pointed my finger in the direction of the front door he was about to walk out when he looked at me inches from my face and said "why do you always have to be so... so..." then we kissed. it wasn't a soft kiss it was 7 years of pent up... well a lot of things were pent up. neither of us can recall who kissed who but the door was shut and we ended right on my bed, that night we lost our viginities. we've been happy together ever since and very much in love. let's just say when my parents found out we were dating they were confused and wouldn't drop what had changed. maybe i'll tell them somday... :) update soon!

Wow - wow... please update soon.

Wow! this story is frickin wkd! keep it goin! i wana no wat happens nxt! merry Xmas!

Hey kissherdraco, I love, love, love your story. I

Oh lord I want to kick your ass six ways to sunday. DAMNIT get someone all worked up then...nothing FUCK FUCK FUCK. You like so screwed up my body right there. *sigh* but damn if I dont love it. LOL wow so freakin closes and then... *sigh8 I'm like really hot and bothered right now...update soon.

Oh.
I know you've heard it a million times by now, but you are without a doubt the best Hr/D writer I have ever read. So perfect. So bloody perfect. Please update.

Oh wow!! Please up date soon this story is just too good.

You cannot leave it there! That was pure evil... Please update soon

You must update as soon as possiable your story is amazing, it pulls me right in so deep, its aboustly beautiful. PLease update soon!