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Okay it was touch and go for a while there but you have me now. I see a spark of humanity in him.

Okay it was touch and go for a while there but you have me now. I see a spark of humanity in him.

Keep the chapters coming! Finish please!

Please Update this cliffy is going to kill me!

"I read the whole thing and it's a really good story -- you can obviously WRITE, but man the cussing is just really out of character and you just way overdo it. Even IF Draco and Pansy cussed a lot, I don't see why Hermione would, too. And IF she did, she probably wouldn't cuss often because educated people like Hermione would have a broader command of her language and the vocabulary to choose more appropriate words with which to express herself. At one point she even says to Draco, "Is [fuck] all you ever say?" I was asking the same thing! I analyzed the 11 chapters and found this breakdown of words and how many times you used them:

Fuck 555
Shit 26
Bitch 63
Whore 22
Slag 21
Damn 15
mudblood 61
twat 11

You actually use the word "fuck" five hundred and fifty-five times! That's got to break some kind of record somewhere. It is really becoming almost comical because no matter what happens, we know that everyone's going to react by saying "fuck" a lot. If you changed some of the language, the story'd be very very cool.."

That is the most ridiculous thing I have ever read. As other people have said, if this Mena girl actually spent her time counting how many times you've used some type of profanity in the story, she musn't have been concentrating on the beautiful story itself. Isn't this site called ADULT Fan Fiction, and isn't this story rated NC-17?? Obviously there's going to be obscenities, it's unavoidable with all the emotions running high. And the whole Hermione-shouldn't-swear thing is just stupid. Ugh.. this really makes me mad.

Well, I personally don't think you should have gone back and changed it for one person. If they can't handle it, then perhaps they shouldn't be on this site at all. I'm impressed at your determination to please your fans, but maybe you should slow down a bit xP.

Anyway. I love your story. Aside from Indago, by LdDurham, it's the best fic I've ever read. It's beautifully written, and it's such a heartwrenching story.. I'm obsessed =D I also love how your chapters are so loooong <333 I usually don't like D/Hr, but my friend said this one was amazing, so I started it and couldn't stop. Well done ;D.

Very, very good so far. I'm liking the tension and the way that Draco and HErmione don't magically love each other instantly. I also liked the way Draco stopped during their first...I suppose you could say, encounter? As a suggestion, I think that the time they kiss "for real" it should be Hermione that initiates it. After all, the other times has always been Draco very much forcing her and it would be a nice touch for a real kiss to be initiated by Hermione. Anyway, I'm really liking where you're going with this - and I am by no means easily pleased! Update soon!

Wow. Just incredibly wow.

You are Bloody Genius!!! This fic is absolutely Brilliant!! This is the BEST Draco/Hermione fic i have read so far!!
Great story! keep it up! Your story is getting even more interesting as chapters go by. I can't wait to know what happens next. Hope you post a new chapter soon!!

I have read and re-read your story many times. This is a testament to your talents!
Thank you for being alive and a writer! Now! Fingers back to the keyboard because now, and I'm not sure when this happened, but your story has become like water to me.
Love, Rosei

I wanted to add to my previous review of ch. 11, because I forgot to mention a few things, first off, aside from this sentence, I won