rate_review Reviews

Not a bad story, and you have decent skills as a writer. I can tell you worked hard on it. BUT the characterizations are horrible. For example, like in this last chapter, you had Snape, Pomfrey, McGonagal, Dumbledore and Lupin standing around like a bunch of silly teenagers discussing Harry and Hermione shagging and the size of Harry's "shlong". Not to mention the bit about Hermione's thong. (Hermione in a thong???) In what universe would this actually happen?
Perhaps you should list this as a humor or parody fic so people won'y be thrown off by the... well, weirdness of it all. This really isn't meant to be a flame, I'm just saying.

i like your story please update soon

angel

OMG- not a bad story but c'mon... "You're great, Harry." "No, you're great Mione" "You've got great abs, Harry" "No, you have great abs, Mione." "You're sexy." "You're sexier." "I you love." "I love you more." You need to work on the dialogue hon.

yeah. i agree. you need to work on the dialogue.nevertheless,it was funny.the way lupin and dumbledore continue their normal conversation in that room...and the discussion the staff had about potter and granger. its insane,but hilarious.