rate_review Reviews

I see nothing to complain about in your erotic prose. It is actually quite good! Keep up the great work! (And please update more often if possible!!!!)

I'm sorry but you have failed to convince me that you are a 12 year old posing as a 24 year old. That was a tad too erotic to pull off as a 12 year old, and this story is a bit to literary based.

Sarcasm put aside though... that was hot. Very, very, very nice. I loved that Draco was able to hold back, as interesting it would be to have them shag right there in carriage, I suppose it wouldn't be very appropriate. Excellent chapter. I loved it. Don't worry, I have the upmost confindence in you that you will manage to keep writing this story. Excellent. I can't wait for me.

This chapter was just perfect

This was AMAZING! Don't you dare think otherwise.

So very hot and sweet and oh *GOD* could Draco get any sexier? Reciting prose in the middle of such an act. Now... if only all men were that romantic.

I particularly liked the allusions to Red Riding Hood and The Big Bad Wolf. Very sweet. You've captured the Hermione/Draco banter superbly. Please update soon.

Bek

beautifully erotic, well done

update soon!

Update soon..I really love this story!!!

Oh I love it! You don't sound like you don't know what you're talking about! I've loved this story from the beginning and I cannot wait for more ;)

awesome. no really it was really great.

Your story is awesome. Haha. I want more !

Okay, so I know I said I was going to sleep, but I have no self control so I came to read instead. It is now 3:30 and I'm getting up at 8 and I'm still awake and reading because your story is just THAT good!

12 year old virgin my ass! I don't know where this insecurity comes from, but you must let it go immediately because that was aaeow;rtjqaekljfnl;sdcnv! *bangs keyboard in approval*

VERY hot. You must not be nervous because I am proclaiming you a smut master. I loved it. You kept it very classy, which amazes me considering how very hot it was. I loved the use of the Neruda (which consequently, is the name of the composer of a trumpet concerto I'll be putting on my doctoral qualifying recital in a couple months). I love how helpless they are to each other's charms. You've really captured that breathless and intoxicating feeling of starting a new relationship with someone that you just can't keep your hands off of.

I have this vision of Hermione in the pink dress, looking like she's ready for the Oscars. One of the things that I'm unhappy with in my own writing is the descriptions of their physical appearances. It's really hard to convey that type of stuff without turning it into a fashion show or makeover story. So often I think it just trivializes the story, but you did it quite well. It really added to the story rather than being random eyecandy of the imaginary variety.

I'm probably being very nonsensical here as I am utterly exhausted and half asleep but I'm just so excited that I'm going to continue. If this doesn't make any sense, as I suspect is the case, let me know and I'll clarify when I'm NOT braindead.

I love your Luna. I don't know if I've mentioned that earlier, but I LOVE her. What a great minor character, and I love the friendship that the two women share.

The scenario involving Bill and the rings was heartbreaking. It rings very genuine as well. It was extremely well done and a very original take on the past heartbreak idea. Will there be more backstory? I'm really enjoying hearing what happened through Luna's eyes. I really do love the way you've written her and it was very touching to hear her recount the part of the story that she knew regarding Bill and Hermione.

Oh wow, Ara. I'm sure there's more to say but my brain is totally shutting down at this point. What a wonderful chapter. I'm so glad that you are writing for the HP fandom and I can't wait for you to be on LJ!