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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was so good. The scene in the garden was so hot. So very good, really. I love your writing and the way you always keep up wanting more. And you did it perfectly this time with that brilliant ending. I loved it. I can't wait for the next chapter, and I hope it doesn't take too long to get it up.*Dirty mind*I just love the all the talks between them, always a healthy debate and always intellectually stimulating. If only interaction with the opposite sex left us like that. I think evreyone else would read more to get more. Well anyways, awesome job, keep up the great work. Hope to see a new chapter up in the near future.
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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Beautiful - though I'd expect nothing less of you at this point. Hermione quoting Anais Nin while stroking Draco seemed oddly appropriate, with that combination of erotic intelligence that the two have intermingled into their everyday conversations.
You knew from the second they went to the opera that they would be spotted there, so I wasn't at all surprised that the Prophet caught a snapshot of them. I am, however, very much looking forward to all the friends' and families' reactions to it. It should prove quite entertaining.
You knew from the second they went to the opera that they would be spotted there, so I wasn't at all surprised that the Prophet caught a snapshot of them. I am, however, very much looking forward to all the friends' and families' reactions to it. It should prove quite entertaining.
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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This story is brilliant! It's quickly moving to the top of my favorites list, and I hope you update very soon because I can't wait to see what happens at brunch. You've got my vote for Dangerous Liaisons!
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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow! What an amazing story. You're weaving a beautiful and hot romance here. I can't wait to read more!
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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for the email. Would it be too much trouble to ask you include the link to new chapters in future emails? It's much more convient for the readers.
That was a very lovely chapter, and I'm honored that you agree with me.
I was very glad to see the return of Blaise, albeit for a cameo role. I adore him in fanfiction.
As for the point of conflict... it's not really a conflict yet. Excuse me if I'm wrong, but it seems that you just threw it in there for the sake of having one. It's feels incongruent at the end with the rest of the chapter- while most of it was on par with the previous chapters and the whole feel of Tin Angel, the end was more of a misplaced semi-cliffhanger. Be careful to not let the smut overshadow the plot if you want to further develop this point and make it run throughout the rest of Tin Angel. This is a big pitfall many readers fall into. In addition to that, a conflict should develop the characters more. Although I respect that it was meant to be a cliffhanger and the developing should come after, the cliffhanger seems trite and overused in other fictions. The readers can almost predict the ending, and I wonder, what happens after it's resolved? Am I wrong to assume that they live happily ever after with blessings? I was hoping you would bring something new to the table.You could keep it as a series of PWP's. Tin Angel is a very quaint story and would work wonderfully that way and I think many people would enjoy it very much that way.
But, I am not entirely disappointed. You're very talented and have a great deal of potential.
Keep in mind that I am one reader with one opinion out of MANY. To have this many readers, you must be doing something right. You do good work, keep it up. I hope you receive this well.
That was a very lovely chapter, and I'm honored that you agree with me.
I was very glad to see the return of Blaise, albeit for a cameo role. I adore him in fanfiction.
As for the point of conflict... it's not really a conflict yet. Excuse me if I'm wrong, but it seems that you just threw it in there for the sake of having one. It's feels incongruent at the end with the rest of the chapter- while most of it was on par with the previous chapters and the whole feel of Tin Angel, the end was more of a misplaced semi-cliffhanger. Be careful to not let the smut overshadow the plot if you want to further develop this point and make it run throughout the rest of Tin Angel. This is a big pitfall many readers fall into. In addition to that, a conflict should develop the characters more. Although I respect that it was meant to be a cliffhanger and the developing should come after, the cliffhanger seems trite and overused in other fictions. The readers can almost predict the ending, and I wonder, what happens after it's resolved? Am I wrong to assume that they live happily ever after with blessings? I was hoping you would bring something new to the table.You could keep it as a series of PWP's. Tin Angel is a very quaint story and would work wonderfully that way and I think many people would enjoy it very much that way.
But, I am not entirely disappointed. You're very talented and have a great deal of potential.
Keep in mind that I am one reader with one opinion out of MANY. To have this many readers, you must be doing something right. You do good work, keep it up. I hope you receive this well.
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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Anon was me by the way, I completely forgot to fill the above out! My apologies,
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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow! Yes please update me when your posting a new chapter sheedy021065@yahoo.com and of course I will vote for you at DL. All I can say is WOW the last two chapters have knocked me off my feet please keep up the great work.
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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
NOW THAT WAS A GREAT BLOODY CHAPTER!!!!! omg i'm soo happy that u fianlly updated I though I was going mad when I didnt see a new chapter up!!!! keep up the good work and I can't wait until the next chapter!
-Megan
-Megan
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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Such an awesomew story. I love how these two use what they have in common as a way of seeing one another (their love of poetry) and how they've decided to bury the hatchet and start fresh. I love the instant attraction Draco had to Hermione from minute one. And the sex scene was awesome! I'm quite impressed that this was your first lemon. Two erotic thumbs up! ;)
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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ahh! What an ending! I hope you intend to update as soon as possible because I'm going to die if I don't know everyone's reaction soon. Lol. Ok, that was a little dramatic, but I would like to know what happens! I love your story and it DEFINITELY has my votes come Feb 13! ^_^