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November 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
great fic, as always! wonderfully dirty..who in their right mind would screw Sirius instead of Severus anyway?! ;)
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November 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Umm.. Ms. Figg..??
Putting all the negativity and misogyny of the previous story aside....we will overlook your lack of a suitable apology for the moment..
Perhaps you can find something inside you to write a steamy, pornorific story about Snape and WILLING females (Slytherin or muggle) residing in the dark time of his post- graduation from Hogwarts......before he kowtowed to Dumbledore and became the Potions Professor?
O.K.. I\'m really not panting......I\'m merely being suggestive.
Putting all the negativity and misogyny of the previous story aside....we will overlook your lack of a suitable apology for the moment..
Perhaps you can find something inside you to write a steamy, pornorific story about Snape and WILLING females (Slytherin or muggle) residing in the dark time of his post- graduation from Hogwarts......before he kowtowed to Dumbledore and became the Potions Professor?
O.K.. I\'m really not panting......I\'m merely being suggestive.
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November 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
well i think that this story was just as good as the rest having read it i can understand why Severus was the way he was you are a fantastic author i love your work and cannot wait till you wrote another one
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November 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I think the problem I had with this story was Snape\'s way overdone Madonna/Whore complex. The readers are led to believe that it was HIS decision to hold back, and that the girlfriend may have been more than willing to take their relationship to a deeper, physical level had the subject been broached. Which makes what he ultimately did to her all the more vile, from an ethical standpoint. We know that he redeems himself via Hermione\'s love some 20 years in the future, but I was a little uneasy with this portayal of him, and was glad the girl (who struck me as more of a Hufflepuff than a Ravenclaw) didn\'t end up with a Snape who was so full of misogynist sexual issues.
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November 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hyp: lol. Not a bad idea. Hmm. Randy, dark young Severus cashing in on his dirty pensieve/deatheater status. Still in brutal \"give \'em what they think they want\" mode. Sounds delicious to me. Now one or two women? Mother and daughter perhaps?choices, choices. Wipe your mouths, ya\'ll. I can sense the drool. I\'m drooling a little myself. :::eg::: lol. Will see what twisted scenario I can come up with. Maybe some pureblood witches who want the dark mark, down in the lower levels of Hogwarts. Not from Slytherin either. Hmm. Thanks Hyp. I\'m geared.
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November 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Charmy-
In the third paragraph of the first chapter, it\'s clear that it\'s Snape\'s decision to hold back, since she\'s of such \"good character.\" Translation: Snape\'s more than willing to put her on the \"Nice girls don\'t put out until marriage\" pedestal. We are given no hint as to what SHE wants; hell, she might just be shy! And from the way the poor thing responded to Black (without a lust potion, no less!!) I think if she was such an adherent to the White Wedding Cult, she would have fought his advances. I can\'t help but see her as a victim and a pawn used by both Snape and Black.
I think Severus\' (mal)treatment of her might have been more acceptable had she deliberately played games with his head and with his heart, say if she was in on something with Black from the beginning, but this appears not to be the case.
The whole intrigue of Severus Snape is that you just never know how much good he has in him, or how much bad. Personally, I like to keep guessing.
In the third paragraph of the first chapter, it\'s clear that it\'s Snape\'s decision to hold back, since she\'s of such \"good character.\" Translation: Snape\'s more than willing to put her on the \"Nice girls don\'t put out until marriage\" pedestal. We are given no hint as to what SHE wants; hell, she might just be shy! And from the way the poor thing responded to Black (without a lust potion, no less!!) I think if she was such an adherent to the White Wedding Cult, she would have fought his advances. I can\'t help but see her as a victim and a pawn used by both Snape and Black.
I think Severus\' (mal)treatment of her might have been more acceptable had she deliberately played games with his head and with his heart, say if she was in on something with Black from the beginning, but this appears not to be the case.
The whole intrigue of Severus Snape is that you just never know how much good he has in him, or how much bad. Personally, I like to keep guessing.
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November 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
A down n\' dirty story free from misogynistic undertones involving the one Severus Snape is probably a fabulous idea. Many a\' willing lady will take a savage pounding from a dark and quasi-sinister man who gets her juices flowing...
It would seem I\'m in a filthy mood tonight LOL.
Can I recommend sisters for this imminent tale of delicious debauchery? Perhaps they can be daughters of upstanding, pious parents who espouse only the squeakiest, cleanest, sparkliest values imaginable. Ah, I love the smell of juxtaposition in the morning!
;)
Feel free to dismiss my ramblings lol.
It would seem I\'m in a filthy mood tonight LOL.
Can I recommend sisters for this imminent tale of delicious debauchery? Perhaps they can be daughters of upstanding, pious parents who espouse only the squeakiest, cleanest, sparkliest values imaginable. Ah, I love the smell of juxtaposition in the morning!
;)
Feel free to dismiss my ramblings lol.
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November 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I think that this was well-thought out, planned down to each grisly detail. It enthralled me, perhaps more than I wanted to. I noticed you didn\'t really touch down a great deal on the girl\'s side of things, I really felt sorry for her, thanks to the cold situation. It\'s about territory and dominance, and you hit the nail on the head with that one. Its about not being ever able to go back to innocence. You portrayed Snape\'s character well. (was he always so cold?, yes, I think he was.) awesome.
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November 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi all. Yes, this was a really ugly story. It had to be ugly to start him on his path. This was a young Snape age 17, never in love before
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November 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ms. Figg,
I have enjoyed many of your other stories, as your Snape/Hermione series is particularly strong. My praising them is saying a lot, considering that I am primarily a Draco/Hermione shipper. Still, I must convey that I was a little disappointed in this one for several reasons, the main reason being how you chose to deal with sensitive subject matter.
I think that a majority of Adult Fan-Fiction fans enjoy seeing mysterious male characters take on strong sexual personas. Power is an aphrodisiac, and seeing a reserved character transform into a Sex God is often fun. I consider myself a Snape fan, so although your take on Severus as a porn-star extraordinaire doesn\'t necessarily jive with my idea of him - sexual or otherwise - I see definite merit in your generally well-written and creative prose.
My main problem with this story is how you have taken your formerally sexually expressive interpretation of Snape and transformed it into something far uglier. In this story, Snape is a full-blown misogynist. I understand why he would be hurt over Sabrina\'s betrayal, but at the same time I have to agree with the other reviewer who said that the pedestal he put her on reeked of masculine sexual insecurity. In his mind, the ultimate woman is one who shuns sexuality unless it is experienced within the confines of marriage. The most troublesome part of this is that your story excused - nay, celebrated - his vengeance and his condemnation on and of her. Must a good woman always be one who is asexual? Certainly you do not believe this to be true, judging by your past works that sing the praises of unconventional sexuality in both men and women.
Snape\'s abhorrent revenge did not seem the least bit justified. It was cruel, unncessary, and ripe with chauvenistic pretense. He had a right to be angry, yes, but perhaps that anger would have best been expressed in a less brutal manner. Still, what troubles me most is the glorification of Snape\'s sexist ideals. In this case, I have to say that I sympathize with your somewhat vapid and poorly developed OFC, not your insecure hero.
Still, I look forward to more of your Snape/Hermione stories in the future. You do have a gift for writing unapologetic erotica, and I generally do enjoy your work.
I have enjoyed many of your other stories, as your Snape/Hermione series is particularly strong. My praising them is saying a lot, considering that I am primarily a Draco/Hermione shipper. Still, I must convey that I was a little disappointed in this one for several reasons, the main reason being how you chose to deal with sensitive subject matter.
I think that a majority of Adult Fan-Fiction fans enjoy seeing mysterious male characters take on strong sexual personas. Power is an aphrodisiac, and seeing a reserved character transform into a Sex God is often fun. I consider myself a Snape fan, so although your take on Severus as a porn-star extraordinaire doesn\'t necessarily jive with my idea of him - sexual or otherwise - I see definite merit in your generally well-written and creative prose.
My main problem with this story is how you have taken your formerally sexually expressive interpretation of Snape and transformed it into something far uglier. In this story, Snape is a full-blown misogynist. I understand why he would be hurt over Sabrina\'s betrayal, but at the same time I have to agree with the other reviewer who said that the pedestal he put her on reeked of masculine sexual insecurity. In his mind, the ultimate woman is one who shuns sexuality unless it is experienced within the confines of marriage. The most troublesome part of this is that your story excused - nay, celebrated - his vengeance and his condemnation on and of her. Must a good woman always be one who is asexual? Certainly you do not believe this to be true, judging by your past works that sing the praises of unconventional sexuality in both men and women.
Snape\'s abhorrent revenge did not seem the least bit justified. It was cruel, unncessary, and ripe with chauvenistic pretense. He had a right to be angry, yes, but perhaps that anger would have best been expressed in a less brutal manner. Still, what troubles me most is the glorification of Snape\'s sexist ideals. In this case, I have to say that I sympathize with your somewhat vapid and poorly developed OFC, not your insecure hero.
Still, I look forward to more of your Snape/Hermione stories in the future. You do have a gift for writing unapologetic erotica, and I generally do enjoy your work.