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November 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Im glad you updated so soon but the third chapter was way to short.Please add more to this chapter are make up for it in the next.
schedule
November 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yes, I think this is in character, both of them. And having Hermione freeze up and accept that she wouldn\'t be able to fight him is also very realistic, I think. BTW, Snape shouldn\'t be using Voldemort\'s name, as per canon.
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November 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awsome chapter! I can\'t wait to read more. Please update again and soon!
Tiffany
Tiffany
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November 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Interesting. update soon! Want to know what happens next!
Tiffany
Tiffany
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November 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice start but a little too soon to tell how it will go. Good luck and if you would like I will beta for you.
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November 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Severus sure put his foot in it now, what a misjudgement. How is he going to make this up??? Update soon.
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November 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Uh oh. Now what\'s going to happen next?! I can\'t wait to find out! Update again and soon!
Tiffany
Tiffany
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November 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Not a bad start at all. Yes, the second chapter was a little bit choppy, but all in all, quite well done. I wouldn\'t mind beta\'ing this story for you if you are still interested. I\'m a beginner beta, but I love doing it.
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November 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Im definatly interested in the story,please update real soon!Oh and about the beta thing.Your plot is really good but it is true that you need a beta.I will give you some tips!When Hermione is thinking do it like this for example*I can not beleave this is happening!*She thinks excitedly.Also I liked the way the first chapters set-up was,I kept having to scroll to the side in the second chapter.I love your story so here is a little help.
XOXOSnapesGirlXOXO
XOXOSnapesGirlXOXO