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November 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is a real possible out come for the ending of the HP books..Severus and Harry have given and given and given. What more does the WW want? Even if they can prove, for real that he was doing what Albus wanted Severus will die a hated,despised, and very bitter man,with out Harry at his side as friend, mento, or heaven forbid lover.
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November 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Not bad, strange. I hope you keep up at it.
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November 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
More please, More!!!!
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November 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oooh y??? whats wrong??? more soonc ya x
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November 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yea!!!!
I knew he was going to go back to clean up the mess. I'll bet he needs the potion which will give him a tie to Severes.
I can't wait to see how he fixes them.
Keep up the good work!!!
Please!
I knew he was going to go back to clean up the mess. I'll bet he needs the potion which will give him a tie to Severes.
I can't wait to see how he fixes them.
Keep up the good work!!!
Please!
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November 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Among many things, I appreciate how often you update. Your chapters are well-written, for the most part, although Harry can come off as wooden instead of in control of his emotions. I'm looking forward to the next installment.
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November 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oo,oo,oo good story. Looking foward to more.
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November 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
More, More More! Good chapter. And what bug crawled up Draco's butt?
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November 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh rats, Harry really has to leave. Now howis he going to talk to Severus??
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November 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Definitely a well written piece and I'm looking forward to seeing more, you craft the tale well. On occasion you need to watch for stating more than is needed, or at least making it appear as if you are explaining rather than story telling. In recounting the evidence for Snape's allegiance to light it almost comes across as you making your case, rather than part of the story. A shorter example to give you an idea what I mean is also in chapter one: "He wasted no breath on responding to Riddle