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for No one messes with her

by namilie

person Anon
schedule November 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
person Anon
schedule July 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
person Wolf
schedule December 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
REally confusing.@_@

Voldemort is good?Dumbledore bad?=/

I didn't get who was talking half the time..better luck next time.
person LaBibliographe
schedule November 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Storylines can be anything that an author wishes to write, so I have no basic problem with your plot. Because it is a one-shot, it couldn't have a great deal of back story, however, perhaps just a short exposition on how Hermione became a veela, added somewhere in the story, would be less confusing to the reader. One-shots,ironically, are the hardest form of story to write because each word has to count for more in painting your world for others to see.

I do wonder, did you read it over a few times before posting it? That always helps me to find little typos and other errors that plague my first drafts. I don't know why, but it almost feels like English is a second language for you. If so, then I wish I knew another language as well as you do. But there are numerous small verb tense mistakes and other slight language errors that a good beta could help you with. You have a good imagination which is the major requirement for a writer. The grammar and punctuation can be polished. I hope if you continue with this story, you fill in a bit of the background you've alluded to in your first chapter.

It's promising for a first effort.
person DDMalfoy
schedule November 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
WTF? This was incredibly hard to follow and you turned Lucius into some wussy little crybaby.
person Megan Consoer
schedule November 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters? Or can you write a sequel to this story please?
person Alyson Diaz
schedule October 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Please make a sequal1
person Megan Consoer
schedule August 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters? Or can you write a sequel to this story please?
person K.C
schedule July 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I HATE YOU YOU KILLED DRACO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *CRYING* not my baby!!!!!!!!!!!
person Megan Consoer
schedule June 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?