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for The Halloween Ball

by rush22

person Edania
schedule January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh you did cliff -hanger in us. ohh can't wait to see and what snape does.
schedule January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
More!
Quick!
More!
Quick!
I like this story so far..its great
person Kris
schedule January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wanted some action, skimmed all the boring parts and finally got to an interesting chapter; this chapter. And of course its the shortest. *stares* *sigh* Anyway's cant wait for the next chapters!
person Anon
schedule January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is a good premise, but your writing is rather long-winded. The endless explanatory narrative is distracting.
schedule January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hello!

I am really enjoying this. Might I recommend finding yourself a quality BETA to help with the grammatical errors and maybe with the flow of the story.

Also, it\'s \"Voldemort.\" Just for future reference. *wink*

Otherwise, I liked your idea for the potion that would kill The Dark Lord. Inventive. Keep it up!


~AmazingEnthusiasto~
person GaiaAthena
schedule January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
MORE???? I've enjoyed this so far...looking forward to the next chapters.
person Angie30
schedule January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'm so loving this story! Keep up the great work and I look forward to another update.
person Lanjana
schedule January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hallo! I really like your story and couldn't wait to read the new chapters. Dumbledores costume is great and perfectly fitting his sense of humor. By the way I noticed a tiny mistake: Ares is the Greek God of War (as Aphrodite is Greek). The Roman God of War is named Mars (but it's not THAT important, as the Romans assimilated the Greek Panthenon. So Mars is the same God as Ares but under a new name).
Keep on wirting :-)
schedule January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Albus sure is a nosy old coddger. hahahaha. I can't wait to read more. Please update again and soon.

Tiffany
person K
schedule January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ch. 5 - loved it, can't wait for an update.