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October 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Roach "magic stick" and a wand are basically the same thing!
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July 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Magic stick? Did Professor McGonagall call a wand a magic stick? What in the world?! You're grammar is horrid, and the characters hardly make any sense at all. Sorry, but this wasn't very good. I believe you desperately need a beta-reader.
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January 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
idea was original but totally OCC, the situation is revisable though.
Do you actually READ harry potter, neither of them is rly like that.
Your language was also quite poor, you might want to get a beta
Do you actually READ harry potter, neither of them is rly like that.
Your language was also quite poor, you might want to get a beta
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November 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
your spelling sucks
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November 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, it\'s great, if you liked it anyway :) It\'s not a deadly serious story at all. That story would be actually a parody yet beacause my poor English :)
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November 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I don\'t know whether to laugh... or what. Lol. but i\'ll laugh. That was amusing, even if it wasn\'t supposed to be. I liked it though;) ahahhahaha.
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
update soon
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
One thing is clear. You need a beta reader. So do I, so that\'s not so bad. :-)
Your story has the potential to be great smut, but the bad grammar and spelling get in the way of the readers\' enjoyment.
By the way, it\'s McGonagall. ;-)
Your story has the potential to be great smut, but the bad grammar and spelling get in the way of the readers\' enjoyment.
By the way, it\'s McGonagall. ;-)