rate_review Reviews

Man, I like your ideas, but I just have to say this. I hope you won't take this the wrong way, just a little constructive criticism: WAYY-hoo-WAYYYYYYYYYYY too many run-on sentences, inproper punctuation, bad spelling, places where you should have a space where you don't... You NEED to try to fix this, or get a beta, but this story is just barely legible! Sorry x(

I think that you should continue with this story...it is really good! I would love to see how it ends...if you need any ideas...e-mail me.

The general idea was good, and I loved the action.

But you need to fix the grammar and typos that are littered throughout the story. It just makes it look dirty, and with the correct punctuation, this chapter could shine.

I hope you fix it, and then make more chapters. I LOVE IT.

aww thanks livvy!!
-snugs-
i know it\'s not long and only a one shot but thanks all the same...
-grins-

Well done Gin! Really good for a first fan fic. Sehr gut!
-grins-
xxx