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December 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
not bad, not bad at all.... a little sick, but NICE :P
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December 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
more plz..
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December 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
intresting story a wee bit disturbing but good none the less update doon
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December 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great Story keep up the good work
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November 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
What\'s taking you so long?
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November 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was truly sadistic, of course in that kind of situation I would be as well
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November 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Can\'t wait to read more please post your newest chapter as soon as you can
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November 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
grate fic plz update
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November 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Im pleased that you posted an expescially long chapter! looking forward to the next one.
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November 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 2
Okay, I like how you had the reinforcement of the truce between Harry and Voldemort shown. Harry\'s plan was elegant in its simplicity as well as showing his honesty in regards to his planned interaction with Voldemort. I thought Voldemort\'s concern of how his oath could interfere with Harry\'s plan for revenge on the Weasleys in turn showed his faith in the truce. Although there was one minor problem here: before going to the meeting, Harry tells Remus that when the meeting is over, he is going to go to the Burrow and extract his vengeance. But during his dialogue with Voldemort, Harry tells Voldemort that his Death Eaters will find the Burrow empty. And upon his return to Remus, Harry asks how the rescue/kidnapping went. Just a minor point, but it did cause me a little confusion during the meeting.
Harry\'s treatment of Ginny upon discovery just how evil she has been was a bit unexpected. I\'m not saying she did not deserve it for her betrayal of both Harry and Hermione. Just that leaving her suspended by her broken limbs would be extremely painful and out of the blue. The level of violence leveled against her in that on scene seems odd when compared to the duration of punishment given to Molly and Ron.
Now, don\'t get me wrong. Molly and Ron\'s fates were deserved. And I have no problem with the end-result, but I guess I may be a bit more vengeful. It seems that neither one suffered enough. To clarify, Ron is mutilated and killed. Fine. But he had continually raped and brutalized his friend. He attempted to enslave her. Considering this, his death seemed to be excessively quick and therefore merciful. I do like that he continued his arrogance to the point of demeaning Hermione, even in front of Harry, even while bound.
And Molly was worse. She was responsible for her two youngest children\'s attitudes. She was also warping her husband. Upon revival, she railed against Harry and Hermione as being unclean. She begged her \"pure\" child to kill herself rather than be polluted by the lesser-beings. Yes, Harry killed her in a nice and gruesome manner. But again, given the level of pain (and on-going mental anguish) she was responsible for, the very short time of mental torment seemed to be much too kind. Granted the acidic tears were a nice touch, but it just came across as a minor inconvenience. Also, she again was livid at the idea of Ginny being with Harry. This attitude begs the question of why then was she allowing Ron to enslave Hermione? Ginny enslaving Harry is almost understandable, given his fame, money, and such, but it still goes against her character type given the arguments here at her death scene.
The one argument for the apparently quick kills is of course that Harry (and Hermione) have not yet gone completely dark yet. That they still have a streak of good within them. That the mercy they showed the two was the last glimmer of their former selves. I don\'t know; Harry has enslaved Ginny, made a deal with his parents\' killer, plotted the killing and torture of the two Weasleys. Hermione brutally emasculated her rapist. So, why would they show the kindness of a quick death?
I do like that you had the Weasleys being split over Molly and the others actions. Rather that making the family unified in their attitudes, Arthur and the older sons were disgusted at the idea of the actions. I like this for two reasons. The first is that it does not completely remove Harry\'s support structure. If everything he believed in and all he trusted were taken away, he would be too unstable to be an interesting character. This way, he can begin to become a meaner, nastier character but still be a viable lead. The other reason is that it juxtaposed well against the Junior Auror (nice name, by the way) being the poster child for the less-polished members of the general public and their attitudes towards the non-pure bloods. Again, if every member of society was against Harry, it would not be believable enough to be interesting. This way, we see that the general consensus is, but that there are still those that are honorable.
I am curious as to Hermione\'s future. Harry had to enslave her in order to restore her. Yet, unlike the spell that was used against Ginny, Hermione appears to be her normal, uninfluenced self. So, I wonder if your use of the spell was plot device to help the two characters get around their previous defenses, as well as the ones that would have developed due to the summer\'s events. Normally, both would be leery of getting into a new relationship so soon after such drastic events, but here they have been forced to become intimate. This allows them to bypass any lingering doubts they may have about themselves. But, there could be other long term effects of the spell. For all we know, Harry may be influencing Hermione\'s thought patterns and decision making in a subtle manner. Which could accelerate her slide into the darker emotions and reactions than would have been foreseen. Or even something else.
All in all, a nice chapter. Like I said, I found the fates of Ron and Molly to be a bit too quick for my tastes given their actions. I may be a bit too blood-thirsty, but I am comparing the speed of their deaths to the amount of pain Harry has already inflicted on Ginny. I look forward as to the next steps in Harry\'s rise to power. I wonder what his plans are that he has Ginny getting back into the noose. And personally, as we have seen Harry be brutal to both Ginny and Molly, we have only seen Hermione truly get her revenge against Ron. Yes, she has used Ginny as her post-loo cleaner, but what about the beatings? I would like to see Hermione show just as tendencies just a evil/dark as Harry\'s. But that\'s just me.
Chris
Okay, I like how you had the reinforcement of the truce between Harry and Voldemort shown. Harry\'s plan was elegant in its simplicity as well as showing his honesty in regards to his planned interaction with Voldemort. I thought Voldemort\'s concern of how his oath could interfere with Harry\'s plan for revenge on the Weasleys in turn showed his faith in the truce. Although there was one minor problem here: before going to the meeting, Harry tells Remus that when the meeting is over, he is going to go to the Burrow and extract his vengeance. But during his dialogue with Voldemort, Harry tells Voldemort that his Death Eaters will find the Burrow empty. And upon his return to Remus, Harry asks how the rescue/kidnapping went. Just a minor point, but it did cause me a little confusion during the meeting.
Harry\'s treatment of Ginny upon discovery just how evil she has been was a bit unexpected. I\'m not saying she did not deserve it for her betrayal of both Harry and Hermione. Just that leaving her suspended by her broken limbs would be extremely painful and out of the blue. The level of violence leveled against her in that on scene seems odd when compared to the duration of punishment given to Molly and Ron.
Now, don\'t get me wrong. Molly and Ron\'s fates were deserved. And I have no problem with the end-result, but I guess I may be a bit more vengeful. It seems that neither one suffered enough. To clarify, Ron is mutilated and killed. Fine. But he had continually raped and brutalized his friend. He attempted to enslave her. Considering this, his death seemed to be excessively quick and therefore merciful. I do like that he continued his arrogance to the point of demeaning Hermione, even in front of Harry, even while bound.
And Molly was worse. She was responsible for her two youngest children\'s attitudes. She was also warping her husband. Upon revival, she railed against Harry and Hermione as being unclean. She begged her \"pure\" child to kill herself rather than be polluted by the lesser-beings. Yes, Harry killed her in a nice and gruesome manner. But again, given the level of pain (and on-going mental anguish) she was responsible for, the very short time of mental torment seemed to be much too kind. Granted the acidic tears were a nice touch, but it just came across as a minor inconvenience. Also, she again was livid at the idea of Ginny being with Harry. This attitude begs the question of why then was she allowing Ron to enslave Hermione? Ginny enslaving Harry is almost understandable, given his fame, money, and such, but it still goes against her character type given the arguments here at her death scene.
The one argument for the apparently quick kills is of course that Harry (and Hermione) have not yet gone completely dark yet. That they still have a streak of good within them. That the mercy they showed the two was the last glimmer of their former selves. I don\'t know; Harry has enslaved Ginny, made a deal with his parents\' killer, plotted the killing and torture of the two Weasleys. Hermione brutally emasculated her rapist. So, why would they show the kindness of a quick death?
I do like that you had the Weasleys being split over Molly and the others actions. Rather that making the family unified in their attitudes, Arthur and the older sons were disgusted at the idea of the actions. I like this for two reasons. The first is that it does not completely remove Harry\'s support structure. If everything he believed in and all he trusted were taken away, he would be too unstable to be an interesting character. This way, he can begin to become a meaner, nastier character but still be a viable lead. The other reason is that it juxtaposed well against the Junior Auror (nice name, by the way) being the poster child for the less-polished members of the general public and their attitudes towards the non-pure bloods. Again, if every member of society was against Harry, it would not be believable enough to be interesting. This way, we see that the general consensus is, but that there are still those that are honorable.
I am curious as to Hermione\'s future. Harry had to enslave her in order to restore her. Yet, unlike the spell that was used against Ginny, Hermione appears to be her normal, uninfluenced self. So, I wonder if your use of the spell was plot device to help the two characters get around their previous defenses, as well as the ones that would have developed due to the summer\'s events. Normally, both would be leery of getting into a new relationship so soon after such drastic events, but here they have been forced to become intimate. This allows them to bypass any lingering doubts they may have about themselves. But, there could be other long term effects of the spell. For all we know, Harry may be influencing Hermione\'s thought patterns and decision making in a subtle manner. Which could accelerate her slide into the darker emotions and reactions than would have been foreseen. Or even something else.
All in all, a nice chapter. Like I said, I found the fates of Ron and Molly to be a bit too quick for my tastes given their actions. I may be a bit too blood-thirsty, but I am comparing the speed of their deaths to the amount of pain Harry has already inflicted on Ginny. I look forward as to the next steps in Harry\'s rise to power. I wonder what his plans are that he has Ginny getting back into the noose. And personally, as we have seen Harry be brutal to both Ginny and Molly, we have only seen Hermione truly get her revenge against Ron. Yes, she has used Ginny as her post-loo cleaner, but what about the beatings? I would like to see Hermione show just as tendencies just a evil/dark as Harry\'s. But that\'s just me.
Chris