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November 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
No, I can understand a girl having a crush at a young age, and I suppose he could have been thinking of her in the way a man wonders if a girl will be pretty when she growsn up. I don\'t know, but anyway, I liked this chapter. I felt bad for him that he had to spend so much time in the bathroom to \"work on his problem\" lol. I\'m wondering if your story takes place entirely on the train, which would be kind of cool. I\'m looking forward to more.
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November 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Deliciously delightful. Can\'t wait for some real HGSS action. Update ASAP!!
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October 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
SWEET story, ud ASAP!
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October 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
great fic! please continue!!
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October 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Much potential... I am excited to see more!
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October 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like this so far. The only thing that sort of made me wince was that he\'d been thinking of her for 4 years. While its still a bit odd him thinking of her at 16, its not as bad as her being 14. Sorry, just my way of thinking. Other than that, I like the story. I\'m looking forward for more.
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October 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please continue! I did enjoy this very much and your writing sems to get better with time.
Sandra
Sandra
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October 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
good but too short and in some areas it was spotty on description so please continue i am interested to see how you develop it
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October 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Thank you cat, I know that it seems liek a blob at the moment mostly due to my trying to get out all of the information at once! I\'ll fix up this chapter and soon add a new one!