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yup, I must be one of the people kicked off the mailing list, though my emaildoes work. oh well, shit happens, but this way I came across the story to find four new chapters! and I must say, they are great chapters. I love this story. And I wouldn't say that it soap opera like. I have recently stopped watching soaps. for one thing, in soaps, you can miss like three months straight and in like two days be causght all the way back up. thats not how this story is, its like everyhitng is important, and I love it.

Oh, so happy your back, weaving your delicious web of power, mystery, longing, and sensuality. Absolutely looking forward to more!

Another great addition my dear!

Sooo need 63! I hope Draco gets the one he wants tooo! And a triad with 2 incubuses! Holy moly!

Wow, this is a really amazing fic. I love it. I don't think it's too confusing at all. I like that you don't reveal everything all at once. It's more interesting this way. And you do supply enough information for me to follow the basic plot of the story. I enjoy reading a fic that keeps me on my toes. I actually have to pay attention to what's going on, because you don't spell everything out for me. The one thing I don't like is that you have spent so much time on Seamus the last few chapters. It's not so much that I'm anxious to get back to the H/D story line, even though I am, but that it feels awkward within the flow of the story. I love it when there are multiple plot lines in a story and the author flashes back and forth between them, but there needs to be an even balance of time spent on each one. Think Tolkein and LotR. It just feels odd that there is such a disproportionate amount of time spent on Seamus all of a sudden. I understand why you did it, but I think it is something you might want to look at in your revision. But other than that I really love this fic. I hope you update soon. Do you have a mailing list or anything so I could get update notifications?

i think this story is really interesting. i especially like ch 12.

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... did I mention that this is original?

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This is amazing! Amazing I tell you!! I'm crying like a fountain after the third chapter! I absolutely love your portrayal of Harry - he is so real! Brave in a silent way, wise beyond his years without making him sound like some perfect mini-Dumbledore, self-sacrifising in a way that is purely Harry (the panic attack was so well done) Plus, I have to say that the fact that there's more to Draco than what meets the eye is wonderfully executed as well. You made him sound very believable and that saved him from being OOC in his actions. I don't have time to list everything but I can tell you that your fic falls down right there with Mijan's Eclipse. I'm flabbergasted.. And this is going to be a creature fic?! It already has more plot to it than any creature-fic in it's entirety! Your story is stylistically enchanting and your writing so flowing I forget I'm reading :) Not to mention it's grammatically correct! You don't boast the abuse, you just tell things as they are and make it sound so fragile but still strong.. like Harry is! I'll go read more - I can't thank my lucky stars enough for finding a treasure like this! *hugges*

Dear gods... *in stupor* this is something else entirely. Disregard what I said about Eclipse - this has more plot twists then a mountain pathway! I can't wait to see what happens next (I'm so far gotten to ch 10). The only thing missing seems to be Harry's muscles (You understand that if the only thing missing is Harry's muscles your fic is pretty damn perfect :) I'm flabbergasted.. utterly blown away.. this tops the Sacrifice Arc.. and there will be smut at some point?.. dear me.. *fanns herself in a slight daze*

I would love to be add to the mailing list for updates. I just finished reading up to chapter 60. It was a very enjoyable experience and you are a great writer. I love the fact you go into more detail with the characters. I also love the way Harry and especially Draco are changing. Reading their interactions has been great fun.

I've been totally and completely obsessed with this story for the last three days. In fact, last night I dreamt future chapters. At least, I dreamt what I thought would be future chapters. I love that your story is so well described it is perfectly visible within my head. It's well written, incredibly beautiful, and your mythology, your OC's are so complex they are heart-wrenching. I find myself fearing learning more about the candidates. I love them all, and don't want any of them to be gone.

And now a little con-crit. First, a little mention on positioning. I know there is one section in the beginning of your tale - will let you know via email so as not to give spoilers - where someone put's their chin on top of someone's forehead, and simultaneously looks into thier eyes. As far as I know, not really possible. It is little things like that which pull me out of the story as I try to comprehend how it might look. And second, my personal pet peeve, and you are so not alone, I fear it is a spell-check program thing. Taunt = tease. TAUT = tight. You are not the first writer I have seen doing that on this site, so I thought I should let you know. Every time you have meant taut, you have written taunt.

Anywho. Seriously, I can not believe how in depth, complex, compelling your writing is. I find myself looking for ways to help you rebuild your mortal realm into something all your own so that you can publish this. Your mythology is to important to be left in the realms of fan-fiction. Keep writing. Your very talented.

I look forward to the next chapter!

~reme